Talk:Umehara ga kimeta
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[edit]- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: withdrawn by nominator, closed by Narutolovehinata5 talk 00:30, 20 October 2024 (UTC)
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- ... that the cries of a fighting game commentator have spawned a huge number of mash-ups?
- ALT1: ... that the fighting game commentator's cry "Umehara ga kimeta" has been described as the No. 1 play-by-play commentary in E Sports history? Source: https://gamer2.jp/post/ogawara0005/
- ALT2: ... that the fighting game commentator's cry "Umehara ga kimeta" is regarded alongside the best Olympic commentaries? Source: https://gamer2.jp/post/ogawara0005/
- Reviewed:
- Comment: I am not a native English speaker, so if there are any unnatural expressions in the text or hooks, I will appreciate it if you could improve them. this is my first recommendation to DYK, so please advise me if there are any mistakes.
狄の用務員 (talk) 08:56, 18 August 2024 (UTC).
- Article is new enough and long enough. WP:EARWIG says "Violation Unlikely". QPQ is not necessary. I'm going to AGF on the Japanese sourcing. Personally, I prefer ALT2, but ALT1 is also good. Overall, seems good to go! Di (they-them) (talk) 19:14, 18 August 2024 (UTC)
- Shouldn't it be "was regarded"? "is regarded" make it sound like a general consensus, when it was one writer's opinion. Even then, it appears to present the source's praise more unquestioningly than the source itself. It looks like the (only) source is being over the top intentionally. They admit their overenthusiasm and the inadequacy of the comparison when they say いやいや、流石にこの2つを並べるのは五輪側に失礼じゃあないか in the same article. Will the ALT2's wording convey the tone? --2001:240:2428:D68C:A88A:93:AE50:2C3F (talk) 00:59, 20 August 2024 (UTC)
- I would propose ALT3.
- ALT3: ... that the fighting game commentator's cry "Umehara ga kimeta" was regarded alongside the best Olympic commentaries? Source: https://gamer2.jp/post/ogawara0005/
- I personally think the source is a normal article, consistent with reliable sources, of a normal tone, of a normal media outlet.狄の用務員 (talk) 13:37, 25 August 2024 (UTC)
- Pulled owing to concerns raised at Wikipedia talk:Did you know#Umehara ga kimeta. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 01:02, 3 October 2024 (UTC)
- With the nominator not having edited in almost a month and no progress on addressing the concerns, the time has come to close the nomination as stale. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 13:10, 17 October 2024 (UTC)
- Narutolovehinata5, as you neglected to retransclude this nominations after pulling it (I did so less than 24 hours before you failed it), and you also did not post a note to the nominator's page about the pulling, I think it's not appropriate to mark this for closure until a couple of additional days at least are given for the nominator to return. I'm posting a note on their talk page in the hopes that they can see this and address the issues raised. Thank you. BlueMoonset (talk) 04:03, 18 October 2024 (UTC)
- Thank you very much for attention to my article. Since the original article was voted as the cover of the Japanese Wikipedia, I think there is no problem with the basic structure of the article and there is likely something wrong with my translation. I reviewed the article several times, and this is the best text I could find to the best of my English ability. As a nominator, I don't think there is anything more I can do, so I am sorry, but I am not opposed to closing it. I apologize for my unfamiliarity with DYK, but please let me know if there is any procedure I need to follow as a nominator in order to close it.--狄の用務員 (talk) 08:41, 18 October 2024 (UTC)
Repetitiveness
[edit]It at some places appears to be repetitive needlessly. Can sentences like these be simplified or is there more nuance to be added? "... many people memorized the phrase and it has remained in people's memories", "... at the interviewer's request, recreated the Crazy Live report The interviewer asked him to reproduce the Crazy Live report", etc. --2001:240:2428:D68C:A88A:93:AE50:2C3F (talk) 00:38, 20 August 2024 (UTC)
- Yes, agreed. As I mentioned when asked for input at a Wikiproject, the tone is way off too. It doesnt sound encyclopedic at all, it sounds very promotional. Sergecross73 msg me 12:34, 27 August 2024 (UTC)