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Chris Redfield

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Nominator(s): Boneless Pizza! (talk) and StarScream1007 13:43, 18 December 2024 (UTC) (UTC)[reply]

This article is about a main character from the Resident Evil game and film series; who is known for punching a boulder at the active volcano in video games.

After Aoba47, Crisco, and Shapeyness (from their talk page) peer reviewed the article I feel like the article has improved a lot. 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 13:43, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Media review and support from Crisco

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Prose comments:

  • Video game magazines have been polarized in their critiques of the character, - Pretty sure it's not just magazines. Journalism is not synonymous with magazine.
    Replaced 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Some critics have referred to a scene of Chris punching a boulder in Resident Evil 5 (2009) as one of the most memorable within the Resident Evil series, which was also subjected to internet memes. - "Which was ..." is a dangling modifier and could be read as "the series was also subjected to internet memes", which is true but not what you intended here.
    Replaced to "Which is" 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Rearranged like this — Chris Woodrich (talk) 22:42, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Chris joined the special operations unit of the Special Tactics and Rescue Service (S.T.A.R.S.). - Isn't S.T.A.R.S. the spec-ops unit of the RPD? I'd rephrase this as "Chris joined the Special Tactics and Rescue Service (S.T.A.R.S.), a special operations unit of the Raccoon Police Department.
    Replaced 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Character designer Tsutomu Kawade noted that Chris' signature was his powerful arms, and they were aware of that. His concept color is green, and Kawade wanted it to be visible, so they designed his attire in blue-tinted green. - These sentences are clunky. Perhaps something like "Character designer Tsutomu Kawade noted that the team was aware of Chris' powerful arms being his most distinctive feature. Their design thus accentuated his arms, with attire in blue-tinted green that continued his concept color."?
    Replaced 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • photo realistic depiction - isn't photorealistic one word?
    Done 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • According to the director of Resident Evil Village, Kento Kinoshita, the production team initially had a different plan for the game's downloadable content (DLC); Kinoshita said that the crew initially preferred a DLC with Rose Winters as the main character, rather than with Chris rejoining the action. - This doesn't really segue with the rest of the paragraph. Also, it doesn't really communicate that a Chris-based DLC was initially discussed.
    I guess it doesn't habe enough detail, so I ended uo removing it. 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • a bio-terror attack - Bioterrorism is unhyphenated above
    Done 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • You use "Rose Winters" above but "Rosemary" below
    Removed 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • He also makes a cameo appearance in Fortnite Battle Royale (2017),[68] Nintendo crossover video game Super Smash Bros. Ultimate (2018) as one of the 'Spirit' power-ups,[69] Dead by Daylight (2016) and Tom Clancy's The Division 2 (2019) as an alternate skin,[70][71] State of Survival (2019),[72] digital collectible card game Teppen (2019),[73] Dead Rising Deluxe Remaster (2024) as an outfit for Frank West,[74] and a robot dressed as Chris makes a cameo reference in Astro's Playroom (2020) and Astro Bot (2024).[75][76] - Might be worth splitting
    Done 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • particularly since his more muscular appearance in Resident Evil 5. - particularly since his more muscular appearance debuted in Resident Evil 5.
    Replaced 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Internet - Capitalized or not?
    Maybe not, replaced 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:41, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • videogames - With a space, I should think? — 
    Done 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Chris Woodrich (talk) 20:58, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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