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Boxer (armoured fighting vehicle)[edit]

Hello, I note your revision but I've just compared the text of the piece you mention to the text in the Wiki article, and they're different.

Here is the actual text you reference:

The Australian government signed a production agreement with Rheinmetall Defence Australia on 10 April for over 100 Boxer Schwerer Waffenträger Infanterie (sWaTrg Inf) heavy weapon carrier infantry vehicles to export to Germany. The company said in a press release announcing the contract later the same day that it would be Australia's largest foreign military export to Germany. The vehicles are being procured under a government-to-government letter of intent signed by Canberra and Berlin in March. Rheinmetall's Military Vehicle Centre of Excellence (MILVEHCOE) in Redbank, Queensland, will produce the vehicles, with deliveries to the German government planned for 2026–30, the Australian Department of Defence (DoD) said in a press release on 10 April. A Rheinmetall spokesperson told Janes that the first 20 vehicles would be produced in Rheinmetall's Kassel and Unterluess plants in Germany, with deliveries scheduled for 2025. The sWaTrg Inf will replace the Bundeswehr's Wiesel 1 tracked tactical direct fire support weapon carrier and equip the German Army's new medium forces. It will be based on the Australian Army's Boxer Combat Reconnaissance Vehicle (CRV), which is equipped with a reconnaissance mission module, including the two-person digital Lance turret, armed with Rheinmetall's MK30-2 airburst munition (ABM) automatic cannon that is also the main armament of the German Army's Puma infantry fighting vehicle. The sWaTrg Inf will also be armed with the Mehrrollenfähiges leichtes Lenkflugkörper-System (Multirole-capable Light Missile System: MELLS), the Bundeswehr's designation for the Spike LR. The Bundeswehr ordered 123 sWaTrg Inf vehicles from Rheinmetall on 21 March. On 20 March the Bundestag, Germany's parliament, approved the EUR1.95 billion (USD2.1 billion) procurement, plus a EUR746.9 million service and maintenance contract. The Bundeswehr plans to have four medium brigades, including the Franco-German Brigade and one formed with the Netherlands. The brigades will be formed by five sWaTrg Inf and two armoured infantry fighting vehicle (AIFV) battalions, with the latter equipped with the planned Boxer AIFV, which could also be based on Australia's CRV, which is more mature and would therefore require fewer modifications. The sWaTrg Inf uses the rear of the vehicle for ammunition storage, while the AIFV could use it to carry infantry. Rheinmetall CEO Armin Papperger said, “We are integrating the expertise and capabilities of our Australian MILVEHCOE colleagues from our global Rheinmetall network to provide the German Army with the required combat vehicles as quickly as possible. This further deepens defence ties between Australia and Germany and enhances a sustained sovereign defence capability in Australia.” In addition to providing the Bundeswehr with sWaTrg Inf vehicles quickly, building them in Australia reduces pressure on Rheinmetall's German plants, which are busy producing equipment as a result of the war in Ukraine, and will allow them to switch production to other systems when MILVEHCOE starts producing the vehicles. Moreover, enhancing Australia's sustained sovereign defence capability supports the country's military modernisation in the Asia-Pacific, an area in which Germany has also expressed strategic interest.

This is the text from Wiki article.

The Bundeswehr will acquire 123 Schwerer Waffenträger Infanterie (sWaTrg Inf) HWC infantry vehicles between 2025-2023, the sWaTrg Inf based on the Australian Combat Reconnaissance Vehicle (CRV). On 10 April 2024 the Australian government signed the production agreement with Rheinmetall Defence Australia for over 103 Schwerer Waffenträger Infanterie (sWaTrg Inf) HWC infantry vehicles for export to Germany. The vehicles are being procured under a government-to-government letter of intent signed in March. Rheinmetall's Military Vehicle Centre of Excellence (MILVEHCOE) in Queensland, will produce the 103 vehicles, with deliveries to Germany planned for 2026–2030. The first 20 vehicles will be produced in Rheinmetall's Kassel and Unterluess plants in Germany, with deliveries of these scheduled for 2025. The sWaTrg Inf is based on the Lance turret-equipped Australian Combat Reconnaissance Vehicle (CRV), but will additionally be armed with the Mehrrollenfähiges leichtes Lenkflugkörper-System (Multirole-capable Light Missile System: MELLS), the Bundeswehr's designation for the Spike LR. In service the sWaTrg Inf will replace the Bundeswehr's Wiesel 1 tracked tactical direct fire-support weapon carrier and equip the German Army's new medium forces. As of Q2 2024, the sWaTrg Inf vehicle is expected to begin fielding in 2027.

I've reverted your edit, BUT..., if you honestly believe there is a copyright infringement here, please highlight the specifics and I will act on them if need be. SurfaceAgentX2Zero (talk) 14:35, 3 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I was bored so decided to rewrite it anyway. BUT..., please do highlight to me what you think was wrong with it in the first place or we will end up down this road again at some point. Thanks.— Preceding unsigned comment added by SurfaceAgentX2Zero (talk • contribs)

Hello @SurfaceAgentX2Zero: You can view the overlap using Earwig's tool. The new version is better but I would take out the part about the letter of intent and simply state that the Australian government ordered 103 units on 10 April 2024. (It's not very copyright compliant and it's a little too much detail.) — Diannaa (talk) 23:41, 3 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Excellent, I like that Earwig thing. I see it even gives a rating which is very useful. I will do some more work on the article today (hopefully) and even though the earwig suggests it's OK, I will tweak the affected a little more. I will see if I can work out how to use earwig going forwards. Thanks. SurfaceAgentX2Zero (talk) 08:53, 4 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I don't actually use the rating; I inspect the overlapping text and see if there's any creative content that needs to come out. — Diannaa (talk) 13:33, 4 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
You were a bit quick with that Boxer text. I really did intend getting back to it. I just wanted to do a little more research and work on some words that could show the order timeline. I note your comments on detail, but in all honesty in this instance those dates are quite interesting. Anyone with any subject matter knowledge will identify from those dates that this procurement was lightening quick in military terms. Obviously brought about by the situation in Ukraine. Of course, I can't include anything in text that says similar to in a quick procurement process..., as that's an opinion and would likely be picked up as such. So I intended to include some dates and events, so that those in the know could work it out for themselves just how quick this process had been. That was the reason for my delay. Sources also do the usual with this sort of stuff and lazy writers substitute the word contract in place of many things that are not actually a contract, and here we have a Letter of Intent, an order, parliamentary approval, and a production agreement. And in various sources these all get individually labelled as the contract... Anyway, I've come up with a few words, and words that hopefully don't cause issues. I'll insert those later today.
And another query if I may. I don't understand why so much history in the article is now not accessible (black lines) after your revision. It's pretty much all stuff all over the article that's not related to your revision. I might be being dim but I don't see why this happens?
And finally, if you spot anything else in the article you think is an issue, would you consider a quick contact via Talk and when I pick that up I'll deal with it? Just saves deletion and disruption? SurfaceAgentX2Zero (talk) 09:05, 5 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The Signpost: 4 July 2024[edit]

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93 amendment of Constitution of India[edit]

Hello Diannaa, can u please tell me why was the page Ninety-third Amendment of the Constitution of India was deleted in 2016. I am thinking of creating new article page for 93 constitutional amendment. Nikrocks12345 (talk) 09:28, 5 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Nikrocks12345. It was deleted for G5: Created by a banned or blocked user (Mushroom9) in violation of ban or block. So were some of the others that are red-linked at List of amendments of the Constitution of India It's ok to start new versions of these articles if you like. — Diannaa (talk) 11:36, 5 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Kakuda (film)[edit]

Hi Diannaa. Would you mind taking a look at this edit. It's directly copied-and-pasted from the cited website. -- Marchjuly (talk) 11:20, 5 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Thanks for the report. — Diannaa (talk) 11:40, 5 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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