Talk:Theatrhythm Final Fantasy: Curtain Call/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: For Each element In group ... Next (talk · contribs) 16:50, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Cukie Gherkin (talk · contribs) 18:38, 31 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

There is no citation that it released in Australia or when it did
I did not find sources about the AU date; now I remove it.--For Each element In group ... Next 06:45, 1 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

The lead specifies that the button controls were implemented for public transport use, but the article does not specify this. I recommend either citing that specific claim in the other part of the article or changing it to match the comment about on-the-go gameplay.
I changed both to "commutes to work or school".--For Each element In group ... Next 13:57, 2 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Release and marketing

I would either recommend removing "Curtain Call was released on April 24 in Japan." or removing the announcement of the release date
Done.--For Each element In group ... Next 06:45, 1 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Images

Not a big deal, but I would recommend that the gameplay screenshot elaborated what it's meant to help the reader understand.
What shall I do for this? Improve the image caption or use another picture?--For Each element In group ... Next 06:45, 1 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Oh no no, I just mean, say, adding something like that it shows the art style or the UI or something to that nature. The image is perfectly fine. - Cukie Gherkin (talk) 14:49, 1 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

References

I noticed that there's a ref idea on the talk page; is there any way you could access that and incorporate it (assuming it would be of use)?
I am not in Japan and I did a search but found nothing. I'm not sure whether WP:RX is useful for a Japanese magazine or not, thus I left the ref idea on the talk page.--For Each element In group ... Next 06:45, 1 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
It's no issue, I just wanted to make sure. - Cukie Gherkin (talk) 14:49, 1 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@For Each element In group ... Next: Right now, my primary concerns are that I've had to adjust grammar and spelling a fair few times during my review of the article. I would recommend getting a second set of eyes to help do a peer review or copyedit of the article and renominate it. If needed, I can do the copyedit for you if I have time, but I would recommend renominating it after such a thing is done. I think you've done a lot of great work on the article from a glance, but it still needs more, and I don't think it can reasonably be done before the GAN is complete. However, if you believe that you can get it done in a week, I would be fine with keeping the review open. - Cukie Gherkin (talk) 20:37, 10 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, you are right. I am currently learning English writing, so the nominated version represents my best effort at this stage. I agree that the article should be renominated once it has been improved in this part.

Thanks for your review! For Each element In group ... Next 13:12, 13 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I understand, and I certainly don't want to discourage you at all. Like I said, once you've had another editor give it a once over to address grammar and spelling issues, hit me up. - Cukie Gherkin (talk) 18:50, 13 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]