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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 16:54, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I'll try to deliver a thorough review of this before the GAN Backlog Drive ends. --Kyle Peake (talk) 16:54, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Remove Stockholm from the infobox since that's not a studio
  • Are you sure protest song is a genre in itself?
    • Hmm, I think one could reasonably argue that it is but I've taken it out just for safety.
  • "is the opening song of The 1975's fourth studio album Notes on a Conditional Form" → "is a song by The 1975 from their fourth studio album, Notes on a Conditional Form (2020)"
  • "while the album was released on 22 May 2020" → "while included on the album as the opening track in May of the following year"
  • "used on the band's previous albums" → "featured on the band's previous albums"
  • Target climate change to Global warming
    • The link is not broken unless there's a specific exceptional reason here.
  • "Extinction Rebellion, the song's release coinciding" → "Extinction Rebellion and the song's release coincided"
    • This makes it an independent clause so I've changed the comma to a semicolon as well (see comma splice).
  • "The 1975 with the" → "The 1975, which had the"
  • "It received positive critical reception, critics praising the song's" → "The song received mostly positive reviews from music critics, who praised its"
  • "its message and the album's transition from this song" → "the message and the transition on Notes on a Conditional Form from the song"

Background

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  • Change the img alt text to something more relevant and not as generic; also, main text should have a fullstop at the end of it.
  • "The first," → "The first album,"
  • Remove wikilink to the second album
    • Once in the lead and once in the body is fine per MOS:DUPLINK.
  • "was released on 22 May 2020" → "was later released on 22 May 2020"
  • "is the first track on Notes on a Conditional Form" → "is the opening track on the album"
    • Went with opening track on the latter just for unambiguity.
  • Target climate change to Global warming
    • See my reply to the same comment above.
  • "She recorded the song "The 1975" in" → "Thunberg recorded "The 1975" in"
  • "Thunberg was the first featured" → "she was the first featured"
  • "The 1975 manager Jamie Oborne" → "The 1975's manager Jamie Oborne"
  • "claimed that" → "stated that"
  • "that he wanted to Thunberg to" → "that he wanted Thunberg to"
  • "but this was unsuccessful" → "but he was unsuccessful"

Composition

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  • Add ref(s) to verify the audio file's info after the text
  • "In Notes on a Conditional Form" → "On Notes on a Conditional Form"
  • "the album opens with a protest song featuring" → "a protest song opens the album that features"
    • Mixed the two to a protest song opens the album, featuring a spoken word ... because otherwise it sounds more like that album is what features the performance.
  • "performance by Greta Thunberg" → "performance by Thunberg"
  • Wikilink ambient music to itself
  • [8][16] can go at the end of the sentence instead
  • "by the band to more" → "by The 1975 to more"
  • Target political to Music and politics

Release and performance

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  • Retitle to Release and promotion
  • "on the album Notes on a Conditional Form, and" → "on Notes on a Conditional Form, and"
  • "its recording in June 2019 it was" → "the recording in June 2019, it was"
  • "performances included the" → "performances included at the"
  • "where the band planned" → "where The 1975 planned"

Critical reception

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  • Too many uses of "of" in this section; replace some with terms like "from"
  • "Reviews following the song's" → "Critical reviews following the song's"
  • "Sean Lang praised that lead vocalist Matthew Healy" → "Sean Lang from the publication praised that Healy"
  • "praised the song as" → "complemented the song as"
    • complimented, I think you mean.
  • "more hardcore" → "more hardcore track"
  • "from the band's former releases" → "from The 1975's previous releases"

Personnel

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  • "Credits are adapted from" → "Credits adapted from"
  • Any specific order here?
    • Alphabetical by surname.

References

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Notes

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  • Good

Citations

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  • Only wikilink the publishers/works/websites on the first mention for each
  • Ah, my apologies, I did miss this one. However, MOS:DUPLINK says if helpful for readers, a link may be repeated in [...] footnotes [...]. Indeed it's common practice even among FAs for publishers and works to be linked at every reference occurrence. — Bilorv (talk) 18:44, 1 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Yeah, but it says "may be repeated" and I don't see how it is helpful to continuously wikilink in the citations; just remove the ones after the first because of this. --Kyle Peake (talk) 20:04, 1 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Copvio score is at 18.0%; that's good!
  • Cite Twitter as publisher instead on ref 7
  • Ref 13's publisher should be BBC
  • Ref 14 should cite as publisher instead

Final comments and verdict

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