Talk:Hormizd II
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Lede
[edit]@HistoryofIran: I think the lede is kinda short; it should incorporate some more material from the body of the article (i.e. a short summary). - LouisAragon (talk) 16:56, 5 April 2019 (UTC)
- Yeah I kinda slacked a bit on that part, will def expand it soon, thanks! --HistoryofIran (talk) 19:49, 5 April 2019 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Royroydeb (talk · contribs) 16:05, 7 April 2019 (UTC)
Doing... RRD (talk) 16:05, 7 April 2019 (UTC)
1. Well written:
- The first sentence of lead needs to be rewritten. "the eighth king (shah) of the Sasanian Empire" must be changed to "Shah of the Sasanian Empire". Shah is primarily a title. Putting "the" before it reduces it to a post (ex. the president of India).
- It would be better if you could copy the first sentence from Henry III of England and make the necessary changes.
- "He was the son...." - It should be "He was a son of and the successor of.." . This change must be done if Narseh had more than one child.
- The first sentence of second paragraph again needs to be rewritten / divided into two sentences.
- The heading of the "Name" section should be "Etymology". The sole sentence of this paragraph needs to be rewritten.
- "this may be his queen " - "this may be his wife".
- "which forced him to surrender " - "forcing him to surrender".
- "assuming a crown resembling the crown" - makes no sense.
- "last years of his reign" - he reigned for two years only. What does "last years" signify here?
- In succession section, the first "he" must be replaced by Hormizd.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
Criteria | Notes | Result |
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(a) (references) | Have a look at MOS:NOTES. The offspring section is completely unsourced. Al-Tabari is primary source. | ![]() |
(b) (citations to reliable sources) | Pass | ![]() |
(c) (original research) | None | ![]() |
(d) (copyvio and plagiarism) | Will check | ![]() |
3. Broad in its coverage:
Criteria | Notes | Result |
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(a) (major aspects) | Comments have been added. | ![]() |
(b) (focused) | Pass | ![]() |
- The name section must be expanded.
- "started out as a cruel ruler but then became benevolent" -Explain.
- The internal turmoil must be expanded.
4. Neutrality:
Notes | Result |
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" avenge the humiliating defeat" - humiliating must be removed | ![]() |
5. Stability:
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Stable | ![]() |
6. Illustrated:
Criteria | Notes | Result |
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(a) (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales) | Pass | ![]() |
(b) (appropriate use with suitable captions) | To prevent MOS:SANDWICH, the first image must be placed at right | ![]() |
17:35, 9 April 2019 (UTC)
- @Royroydeb: Think I've done most of what you asked. As for the internal turmoil part - it's very obscure, there isn't really anything else to write about it, since the only source we have is a rock relief by Hormizd II. Also, the cruel/benevolent ruler part is explained in the quote by al-Tabari. Btw, Hormizd ruled for 7 years. What do you think? --HistoryofIran (talk) 21:11, 9 April 2019 (UTC)
- @HistoryofIran: I have added more comments. Please have a look. RRD (talk) 16:52, 11 April 2019 (UTC)
- @Royroydeb: What specific part(s) do you want me to add citations to in the offspring section? Also, I disagree on the "most likely" (or "probably" for that matter) part, as I've seen various GA/FA articles doing that without having to mention the certain author stating that. --HistoryofIran (talk) 20:37, 11 April 2019 (UTC)
- @HistoryofIran: All the offsprings must be cited. RRD (talk) 11:50, 14 April 2019 (UTC)
- @Royroydeb: Done, anything else? --HistoryofIran (talk) 12:03, 14 April 2019 (UTC)
- @HistoryofIran: I will recheck soon. RRD (talk) 08:24, 16 April 2019 (UTC)
- @Royroydeb: Done, anything else? --HistoryofIran (talk) 12:03, 14 April 2019 (UTC)
- @HistoryofIran: All the offsprings must be cited. RRD (talk) 11:50, 14 April 2019 (UTC)
- @Royroydeb: What specific part(s) do you want me to add citations to in the offspring section? Also, I disagree on the "most likely" (or "probably" for that matter) part, as I've seen various GA/FA articles doing that without having to mention the certain author stating that. --HistoryofIran (talk) 20:37, 11 April 2019 (UTC)
- @HistoryofIran: I have added more comments. Please have a look. RRD (talk) 16:52, 11 April 2019 (UTC)
- @Royroydeb: Think I've done most of what you asked. As for the internal turmoil part - it's very obscure, there isn't really anything else to write about it, since the only source we have is a rock relief by Hormizd II. Also, the cruel/benevolent ruler part is explained in the quote by al-Tabari. Btw, Hormizd ruled for 7 years. What do you think? --HistoryofIran (talk) 21:11, 9 April 2019 (UTC)
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