Talk:Casiri (Tacna)

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Reviewer: Kingsif (talk · contribs) 21:35, 29 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Opening review Kingsif (talk) 21:35, 29 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Style[edit]

Good use of wikilinks
Lead good length for article
Made an amendment to one instance using km template - in this example it doesn't need conversion because the last distance mentioned is the same, but also the style of writing 5 km-long needs that connection which the template can't do
fluvioglacial might need a wikilink
Added. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 19:33, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Very well written in terms of language, structure, connectives, and style
In the hydrology section, I don't think the Quebrada Achuco valley can be "accompanied" by wetlands; is there a different way to say they're in the same place?
Eh, I think that "accompanied" is really the term. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 19:33, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"damaged floodgate caused a damaging flood" seems like it has an extra word, but I also feel it would benefit from some adjective there, if you want to edit that
Swapped with "broken". Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 19:33, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Do metal contamination and alterations causing floods relate? If not, these should be linked differently (or separate sentences)
Reworded this a bit. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 19:33, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Does Servicio Nacional de Meteorología e Hidrología del Perú have a wikilink?
Only to es:Servicio Nacional de Meteorología e Hidrología del Perú. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 19:33, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
In Geology section, "historical time" may sound more natural if rephrased as 'recorded history'.
Added a link. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 19:33, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Composition and eruption history could be combined into one subsection
Hmm. These seem somewhat unrelated topics. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 19:33, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Even though there's plenty of wikilinks, some expansion on the more specialist terms would make understanding the article easier
I never like saying this, but you might need to point to the specialist terms in question as I don't spot them readily. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 19:33, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Needs attention

You could add the es wikipedia link, but otherwise looks good now. Kingsif (talk) 22:20, 5 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Coverage[edit]

Lead gives good overview
May need some clarification/extra info on why people can see Casiri and Paucarani as distinct volcanoes; presumably there are multiple peaks?
Sources are not detailed enough to draw conclusions, sorry. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 19:33, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Good coverage throughout, though later parts are succinct
Needs attention

Illustration[edit]

Good use of images and map, but they're not really spread through the article
Could do with another image for one of the lower sections to even this spread
From what I can tell, there aren't really any other images. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 19:33, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Needs attention

Neutrality[edit]

written neutrally
Pass

Verifiability[edit]

Quality sources
Everything cited in-line
Pass

Stability[edit]

History looks stable
Pass

Copyright[edit]

Check looks good
Images all PD
Pass

Overall[edit]

on hold - A few spots needing attention; I've made some minor mostly comma-based edits; well-written, nice article Kingsif (talk) 22:14, 29 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@Kingsif: Replied to points. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 19:33, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for replies and for updates; I also think I agree with all the points where you haven't been able to action things. Will take a look at the specialist terms and look over article soon. Kingsif (talk) 19:43, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- could add the Es link mentioned above, but otherwise looking good! Kingsif (talk) 22:20, 5 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]