Talk:1936 Paraparaumu train wreck

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Did you know... that in 1936, a dairy farmer unsuccessfully attempted to cut a signal wire to prevent a train from derailing as it approached a landslide in New Zealand?

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The result was: promoted by Lightburst talk 04:03, 5 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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A passenger is carried off in a stretcher with the train wreck in the background

~~... that in 1936, a landslide due to heavy rain caused the derailment of a train (pictured) near Paraparaumu, New Zealand?~~ Source: https://teara.govt.nz/files/d8801enz1.pdf
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Kenya Grace

Created by Panamitsu (talk). Self-nominated at 04:23, 28 September 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/1936 Paraparaumu train wreck; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.[reply]

Happy to review this but please do a QPQ first. Schwede 66 04:47, 30 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]
- @Schwede66: I've added a QPQ now. —Panamitsu (talk) 08:50, 30 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]
New and long enough. Neutral. Suitably sourced. QPQ done. Earwig is clean. The hook talks about a landslide due to heavy rain, but this isn't backed up by the source, which says that the landslide happened "in rainy weather". The source does not give a reason for the slip. The image is freely licensed but not of the greatest quality. Hence, all it needs is an ALT1. Schwede 66 07:25, 2 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
- How about ALT1: ~~"...that in 1936, a landslide caused the derailment of a train near Paraparaumu, New Zealand?"~~ —Panamitsu (talk) 09:06, 2 October 2023 (UTC),[reply]

That hook is factually correct but making is briefer also brings to the fore that it's a dead-boring fact. Can you try and come up with something a bit more exciting, please? Maybe the farmer trying to catch the train in time to prevent the incident from happening? Schwede 66 21:34, 2 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Yup I agree with that. How about
ALT2: ... that in 1936, a dairy farmer unsuccessfully attempted to cut a signal wire to prevent a train from derailing as it approached a landslide in New Zealand?

ALT2 is good to go. I've done some minor formatting tweaks of that hook. Schwede 66 23:38, 2 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]