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  • That's a lot of short sections. Mind combining some?
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  • No need to ref her date of death in the lede
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  • first in around 1941 - in or around?
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  • Grover Cleveland and Anna (née York) Stafford - Did they have the same family names, or not? If not, why?
  • Done. Hopefully makes better sense now.
  • Per WP:ISBN, we should try to use ISBN-13 (you're using ISBN-10)
  • Done all apart from Warner, which appears only to have an isbn 10 listing
  • Check your linking. Some terms or names you link in the lede but not afterwards, others you link in the lede then afterwards.
  • Think I've got them all, but let me know if any are left.
  • "Spoken Word Comedy" - Song, single, or album?
  • Done. Album. Also slightly altered this as sources said nothing about a rare move by Grammys.
  • the Communist newspaper the Daily Worker, - Any way to avoid having "the" in such close succession?
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  • she made history by simultaneously working for two competing record companies. - Perhaps a note on how rare that was?
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  • Hopefully works now as "the Hank Williams song Hey Good Lookin'"
  • You Belong to Me - Why isn't it linked here??
  • It's linked in the lede, but can be linked here I guess.
  • In 1960, Stafford said there were good and bad points to working closely with her husband. She said that Weston's knowledge of her made it easy for him to arrange her music, but that sometimes it caused difficulties. Weston knew Stafford's abilities and would write or arrange elaborate music because he knew she was capable of performing it. She also said she did not believe she could perform in Broadway musicals because she thought her voice was not powerful enough for stage work. - not sure of this paragraph's historical significance. It's more of a style thing than a biographical thing
  • Moved to later section
  • Because she disliked continuously traveling for television appearances that took her away from her children, and because she no longer found it fun, Stafford went into semi-retirement in the mid-1960s, and retired completely from the music business in 1975. - That's... a very confusing sentence. Any way to cut back on the clauses?
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  • Song of the Open Road: An Autobiography and Other Writings - Does this book offer anything useful for the article?
  • As a source yes since it is the only biography of her, but no need to include its mention in the article itself.
  • Got some stuff from here that hopefully helps. Mostly it concerns their earlier career, but there is some useful stuff on the Pied Pipers and the Jonathan and Darlene project. Also found more, from another source, on her participation in the anti-Communist broadcasts of VOA.
  • all of the recordings she made with the company, including those made as Jonathan and Darlene Edwards. - This appears to read as if she was both Jonathan and Darlene
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  • had started as a label for religious music, - When?
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