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Addressed comments from Crisco 1492
[edit]- Prose comments from Crisco 1492
- "Evil is generally explained as the direct result of the free will of humans, as well as being a punishment for the evil use of free will." - So essentially evil breeds evil?
- Would his contemporary perhaps be Fortunatus of Spoleto or Fortunatus of Todi?
- Link names and important terms again on their first use outside of the lede
- "he is either not omnipotent," - Is the standard in theological articles He or he?
- Perhaps a link on "materialism"
- Link "moral evil" on the first occurrence
- Seems to be a bit of underlinking. I've already linked Gentile da Fabriano, please ensure that key concepts and names of people with articles are linked.
- Standardise the Wikisource references (one has a date, one doesn't)
- That's it for today. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 13:09, 30 August 2012 (UTC)
- Thank you for your feedback.
- The theodicy casts punishment for sin as the reason evil exists, and the misuse of free will as the reason that it continues to occur. I have reworded the sentence to that effect.
- I don't think Fortunatus is either of the two linked: the person in question was a Manichaean; the two you linked were Roman Catholoic. I don't think we have a page on this Fortunatus.
- Done.
- I tend to refer to God as he, rather than He. Though it is not specifically mentioned, it seems to fit with the advice at MOS:HONORIFIC, and guidelines about how we refer to figures such as Mohammed. Articles such as God use the lowercase version.
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- That's all; let me know if there's anything else you see. Thank you. ItsZippy (talk • contributions) 14:32, 30 August 2012 (UTC)
- "similar to the formation of a habit." - Perhaps "similar to the formation of habits."?
- Images look fine. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 03:30, 31 August 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks - done. ItsZippy (talk • contributions) 17:12, 31 August 2012 (UTC)