Wikipedia:Peer review/Martha Bradley/archive1
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Another cookery book writer from history for another possible FAC run. I wrote this about four years ago and took it to GA, but I've added more and brushed it up, and I think it's mature enough to try for FA now. All comments with that in mind are most welcome. - SchroCat (talk) 11:50, 17 September 2024 (UTC)
Comments by Alavense
[edit]- Aside from her book - Not having said anything about it yet, I think that reads a bit weird. Maybe something along the lines of Aside from the book she published?
- were a handwritten family recipe collection - was?
- haved all been changed
- 10s. 6d - Lose that full stop.
- telling readers "We have - I'd add a comma between readers and the quote.
- , put the publication date at - Lose that comma between the subject and the predicate of the sentence.
- Is Henry Notaker the Henry Notaker you are talking about? If so, add a link.
- makes .. [the book's] - It should be three of them, ...
- In note d, there's a comma missing before Mason.
- I'd use |ref={{harvid|surname|year}} to avoid having the "a" or the "b" in the sources. Winter 2004b reads a bit weird.
- Also, I created a Commons category, so you can add an External links section with {{commons category-inline}}.
That's what I saw, SchroCat. Kind regards, Alavense (talk) 10:21, 19 September 2024 (UTC)