Wikipedia:Peer review/Dental implant/archive2
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I've listed this article for peer review because it's had major overhaul. It was WAY too technical (e.g. a debate among dentists instead of an article for a layperson), had many WP:COI issues and depended heavily on primary sources. The entire text and structure was changed and many pictures added. References are almost all either textbook, meta analysis or Cochrane reviews. A few primary papers remain, but these are "landmark" papers that discuss a very small topic in the article. It needs an editorial review especially for information that comes off as too technical.
Thanks, Ian Furst (talk) 19:04, 19 November 2013 (UTC)
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at Wikipedia:Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.[?]
Done but would appreciate a second set of eyes for redundancy - Consider adding more links to the article; per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (links) and Wikipedia:Build the web, create links to relevant articles.[?] Done
- Avoid including galleries in articles, as per Wikipedia:Galleries. Common solutions to this problem include moving the gallery to wikicommons or integrating images with the text.[?]
Not done see below
- concepts are difficult to describe without pictures; each gallery is appropriate in my opinion as per; "if a collection of images can illustrate aspects of a subject that cannot be easily or adequately described by text or individual images". Same with use of GIFs in article, only used where stepwise progression is useful tool in understanding a concept or when showing the implant then xray allows the reader to better understand a concept.
- titles added and reformatted as per Wikipedia:Galleries Done
- concepts are difficult to describe without pictures; each gallery is appropriate in my opinion as per; "if a collection of images can illustrate aspects of a subject that cannot be easily or adequately described by text or individual images". Same with use of GIFs in article, only used where stepwise progression is useful tool in understanding a concept or when showing the implant then xray allows the reader to better understand a concept.
- Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 13mm, use 13 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 13 mm.[?] Done - As per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings), please do not link words in headings.[?] Done
- Per WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) may be too long – consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per Wikipedia:Summary style.[?] Done
- Went back and forth a lot on this; finally decided the ToC looked too complex and no one would use it, so I've removed the 3rd order headings
- There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view.
- Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
Allpigs are pink, so we thought ofa number ofways to turn them green.” Done major rework of lead and first section to satisfy
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.[?]
You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas.
- Dental implant links to 1 disambiguation page (SEM) Done
- Can't find this disambiguation page, search all the code and it's not there??
- I looked through the codes and progrmas and the link is NOT there. Most have been a glich in the JavaScript program. -(t) Josve05a (c) 10:59, 23 November 2013 (UTC)