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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by FrB.TG via FACBot (talk) 20 October 2023 [1].


Nominator(s): ZKang123 (talk) 06:59, 12 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

After City Hall MRT station got promoted to FA, I shall also take this chance to nominate its brother station Raffles Place. All aboard! ZKang123 (talk) 06:59, 12 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

GWL

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Congrats on CH's FA! Am reserving a spot here, will get through tomorrow. GeraldWL 10:38, 12 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

And incoming comments! I've put invisible comments to divide my comments based on sections. GeraldWL 09:48, 13 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from GeraldWL 08:39, 16 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]
* "the centre of Singapore's financial district"-- Central Area, Singapore?

MyCatIsAChonk

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Will review, but don't want to reiterate GWL's points- let me know when you've addressed theirs and I'll continue with mine MyCatIsAChonk (talk) (not me) (also not me) (still no) 22:06, 14 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

  • City Hall station is linked twice in the lead
  • While the boulders were hard, they were easily broken. - IMO, not necessary to include
  • Ground treatment of the soil began on 28 May 1984 and completed by April the following year - "was" completed the following year...
  • These murals on vitreous enamel panels depicts scenes of Singapore's history - might be reading this wrong, but I don't think depicts should be plural
  • The "Information portfolio" source in the Bibliography has no sfns pointing to it
    • It's actually for another piece of info I forgot to include, or accidentally deleted. Just added in.--ZKang123 (talk)

ZKang123, that's it, nice job! MyCatIsAChonk (talk) (not me) (also not me) (still no) 11:40, 16 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Support - lovely work! Also, if you get time, I'd appreciate any comments at this FAC. Thanks! MyCatIsAChonk (talk) (not me) (also not me) (still no) 19:49, 16 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thebiguglyalien

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I'll have a review written within the next few days. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 21:56, 24 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

General notes:

  • The prose is choppy in some parts of the article. Look for areas where the prose reads like: "This is a statement. This is another statement. The next statement is this one." These areas need to flow a little better before it meets FA's prose requirement in my opinion. Careful use of transitions and compound or complex sentences do a lot to improve readability.
  • "Due to" is used a lot. I suggest changing some of these to "because". It's simpler and clearer, and it avoids repetition of the same phrase.
  • The article mostly cuts off with the station's opening in 1987. Have there been no major changes of any sort since then?
  • Try to replace, wikilink, or define technical terms when possible.

Lead:

  • The article doesn't say that Raffles Place is "the centre of Singapore's financial district"

History:

Station construction:

Construction of tunnels:

Station details:

  • Do the images here need to be 300px? This section doesn't seem quite long enough to warrant two images this large. Alternatively, given how similar these images are, it might be better just to keep one of them.
  • The station code and the walking distance appear to be added randomly in a paragraph about the routes.
  • Don't use pronouns like "it" when starting a new paragraph, as there's no noun for it to refer to. The first time the station is mentioned in a paragraph, refer to it as "Raffles Place" or "the station".
  • "A few days before the opening" – Of Raffles Place or of Tanah Merah? Tarah Merah is the last station that was mentioned.
    • Clarified it's the MRT extension.
  • "have to alight" – Not sure what this means
  • "Another brass sculpture" – This is the only brass sculpture mentioned in the article
  • "from the Chinese junks" – Can this by clarified or wikilinked?

Ping me if you feel that you've addressed all of the comments or if you have any thoughts about any of them. Once the article is ready, I can go over the prose again. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 17:20, 26 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Source review – pass

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Just a few notes for now. I will conduct further spotchecks in a bit. SounderBruce 19:26, 8 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@SounderBruce: fixed the title cases as much as I could using the title case converter and cross-checking with MOS.--ZKang123 (talk) 06:45, 11 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hi SounderBruce, how is this one looking now? Gog the Mild (talk) 18:02, 19 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Spotchecks on a sample of eight citations were completed and look good. I do have one more concern: there are no citations given for the inflation/currency conversions. Once this is addressed, I'm happy to pass this on sourcing, ZKang123. SounderBruce 19:34, 19 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
The inflated values basically use the in-wiki template (example:{{Formatnum:{{To USD|{{Inflation|SG|70.7|1984}}|SGP|year=2019|r=0}}}}).--ZKang123 (talk) 22:26, 19 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
There needs to be an inline citation to both the inflation converter (provided by {{inflation-fn}}) and currency conversion. SounderBruce 00:56, 20 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Rectified above problem.--ZKang123 (talk) 01:11, 20 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Source review passed. SounderBruce 06:28, 20 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Image review - pass

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No mission-critical issues here, though recommend consistency on alt text. UndercoverClassicist T·C 06:24, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, which images doesn't have alt text? @UndercoverClassicist:?--ZKang123 (talk) 06:34, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry, all have it: not sure what I missed there. UndercoverClassicist T·C 07:24, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the clarification. Also fixed up the other issues.--ZKang123 (talk) 07:29, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
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