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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by Laser brain 21:57, 3 February 2011 [1].

Mangalorean Catholics

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Nominator(s): Joyson Noel (talk) 08:10, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Nominating this for featured article because i think that it satisfies the criteria. Well written! Replete with free images and credible cross-references. This article currently holds GA status. Joyson Noel Holla at me 08:10, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Please delete it! I have requested the association to release it under "Creative Commons". I should get a response soon. Joyson Noel Holla at me 13:07, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Disambig/External Link check - Wow. 11 Dabs! - See here for the list- please change your links to the actual article you meant. You also have tons of external link problems- this is showing 6 completely dead links- most of which are tagged in the article. There's also two that've vanished and are redirecting to the home page, 1 that can't even find the server to 404 on me, and a couple of minor redirects. --PresN 19:09, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • Drive-by comments I'm not going to do a proper review, because RL commitments mean I won't have the time, but a quick glance suggests that the prose is very choppy, with lots of short paragraphs. Also see WP:Lead, and note that refs in lead should be kept to a minimum since it summarises what should in any case be referenced in the main text. Any reason why the notable people aren't alphabetical? Jimfbleak - talk to me? 07:35, 12 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the valuable input, guys! I have done almost all the requested changes, with the exception of fixing two external links. See here. While i am able to access them and found no issue regarding credibility, the tool server indicates that these links have issues. I would appreciate if someone could let me know about what the problems are and also as to what can be done to rectify them. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 16:46, 12 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Sources comments: Mainly minor; no spotchecks carried out, since the article is indergoing revision.

  • Ref 1 needs retrieval date
  • Use bolding in refs 77 and 121 is contrary to MOS
  • Ref 175: Nonstandard format. South Asia Religious News should be italicised
  • Ref 176: Comments on Crasta's book should not be cited to Crasta's personal website.
  • Ref 178: Who is the publisher?
  • Ref 186 needs a retrieval date (there may be others)
  • Ref 218: The link on Ayyappapanicker 1997 does not appear to be working
  • Ref 244: The Hindu should be italicised
  • Ref 245: High-quality, reliable source?
  • Ref 249: This looks like an individual's CV. Although it is cited for factual information only, I don't think it qualifies as a high-quality reliable source. The information can presumably be confirmed elsewhere.
  • Ref 256: This is a private website with no official standing in the Catholic hierarchy. The comments with regard to 249 apply here

Brianboulton (talk) 17:26, 12 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Brian! I’ve incorporated the necessary changes into the article. Now, I would really like someone to conduct a proper review, regarding whether this article satisfies the criteria or not, and if the latter’s the case, then what can be done to change that. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 06:09, 13 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • Images:
  1. File:Kodialche Katholik.jpg is sourced to an image, File:Viren Rasquinha.jpg, which is a likely copyvio from here.
    Re-uploaded image to include a free image of Blasius D'Souza. However, the old image still appears. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 08:51, 15 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  2. File:Mulki Shenoy.jpg and File:Pais Prabhu.JPG - the given sources have no information on authorship, date of publication, etc. Just because a website doesn't include this information doesn't mean the photo was published "anonymously".
    The source for Pais Prabhu.JPG can be found here. I obtained a better version from the site's owner, Walter J. Pais. As for Mulki Shenoy, it is in public domain as it's copyright has expired. My arguments in it's favor can be found here. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 08:51, 15 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  3. File:Mangalorean catholic migration.JPG is poor quality. Would it be possible to replace it with something better?
    I don't know how to convert it into SVG format. I would appreciate some help in this regard. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 08:51, 15 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    I'd suggest Wikipedia:Graphic Lab/Map workshop. Kelly hi! 14:04, 15 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    Thanks! I have issued a request. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 14:25, 15 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    Image has been converted into SVG format. This is the new version, File:Mangalorean catholic migration.svg. Let me know if you find any problems with this one. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 06:49, 25 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  4. File:FranciscusXavier.jpg has no verifiable source or authorship information.
    Replaced image. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 08:51, 15 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  1. File:Mangalorean Catholic Sydney.jpg - OTRS still pending.
No response or OTRS permission sent for the five days. I have removed it from the article. Please delete it. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 08:53, 17 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Weak supportProse comments (well, mostly)
  • You might consider asking an uninvolved editor to copyedit the article. I'm not sure the prose rises to the level of "brilliant".
  • "and gradually the Portuguese were unable to send the required number of missionaries to Mangalore." - this phrase appears twice in one section
Rewrote the entire para. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 15:54, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "These three churches were highlighted by the Italian traveller" - he drew on them with a marker?
Changed sentence to “These three churches were mentioned by the Italian traveller Pietro Della Valle, who visited Mangalore in 1623.” Joyson Noel Holla at me! 15:54, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • The sixth paragraph of "Migration era" needs to be rewritten, it has a number of issues.
Rewritten as stated earlier. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 15:54, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The attacks [...] was also a cause of migration."
Changed sentence to “The attacks of the Maratha Empire on Goa, during the mid 16th century, precipitated the third major wave of migrations.” Joyson Noel Holla at me! 15:54, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Tipu Sultan is not spelt consistently. He is also mentioned several times to be Hyder's son; when done in close proximity, this is overly repetitious.
While we're at it, he is linked several times too. Johnbod (talk) 17:44, 19 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed the spelling, plus links. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 15:54, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The Christians were alleged to have helped General Mathews with a sum of Rs. 3,30,000/-.[56] He summoned a Portuguese officer and several Christian priests from Mangalore to suggest the punishment for the Mangalorean Catholics for treachery." Presumably "He" is not General Mathews; please clarify. (My money is that it's Hyder, but he's not mentioned in the paragraph yet.)
Changed sentence to “Hyder summoned a Portuguese officer and several Christian priests from Mangalore to suggest the punishment for the Mangalorean Catholics for treachery.” Joyson Noel Holla at me! 15:54, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Tippu decided to banish the Mangalorean Catholic community from his kingdom, and hold them captive at Seringapatam, the capital of his empire." Is he banishing them (i.e. driving them out), or merely rounding them up and imprisoning them?
Changed sentence to “Tipu decided to banish the Mangalorean Catholic community from their lands, and imprison them at Seringapatam, the capital of his empire.” Joyson Noel Holla at me! 15:54, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
You miss my point. I see banishment as a decree that gives at least some time for those affected to leave the area; did Tipu in fact give them any time to leave before he started rounding them up? (Cases of banishment I'm familiar with from colonial America operated this way -- banished persons were given time to leave, and only arrested if they returned.) Magic♪piano 21:43, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Well, the word "banish" means to forcibly send someone away from his native place as punishment. It does not necessarily mean that some time was alloted to them, for instance, to pack their stuff and sell their lands. Tipu wanted to round up the Catholics and move them to Seringapatam. The whole idea was to teach them a lesson. Giving them a warning in advance would have failed to make a point. It would have alerted the Catholics who would then have time to hide or leave. As such, the roundup was meant to be a unpleasant surprise to the Catholics. It's success depended on them being caught unaware. I noticed that the article had not mentioned this earlier, and so i have mentioned it now.


Joyson Noel Holla at me! 10:17, 23 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
This is fine. Magic♪piano 21:05, 24 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • OK, not a prose issue: did any Mangalorean Catholics escape Tipu's sweeps? What happened to them?
Yes! In spite of the secrecy and element of surprise surrounding the roundup, an estimated 7,000 Catholics did manage to escape the initial sweeps, and were in hiding in Tipu’s kingdom at the time of the roundup. However, this does not mean that they successfully managed to remain hidden till the captivity’s end on May 4, 1795. Their fate is unknown. One of the books used as a source which is in my possession, “Sarasvati’s Children” by Alan Machado Prabhu, does not shed any light on this matter. My personal opinion is that it would have been virtually impossible for such a large number to successfully remain hidden for so long. So, most were probably caught, while a lucky few managed to escape to Tellicherry, Cannanore and Cochin, or succeeded in remaining hidden within South Canara itself. All this is mentioned in the Captivity of Mangalorean Catholics at Seringapatam article. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 15:54, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
A brief mention should be made here: "Some Catholics managed to escape arrest; the fate of many is unknown" or some such. Magic♪piano 21:43, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Well, i'll decline to do it for the following reasons:
  • Firstly, the source does not state that their fate is unknown. It just doesn't mention their fate.
  • Secondly, there is a likelihood that their fate is known. During my next trip to Mangalore, i plan on purchasing an old book written on the captivity by the Mangalorean historian, S.N. Saldanha. Hopefully, it will shed some light on this matter.
  • Thirdly, mentioning that 7,000 Catholics escaped the initial sweeps is unnecessary, in my opinion. This was a small occurrence and the section is just a summary of the article dedicated to this topic. So, let's just stick to the 60,000 who are known to have been captured and their fate. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 10:17, 23 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Historian Praxy Fernandes [...] stated that 40,000 Christians were not kept manacled" (emphasis added) - this is the first reference to manacles; why is it important to report Fernandes' negative claim?
Changed sentence to “Historian Praxy Fernandes, author of Storm over Seringapatam: the incredible story of Hyder Ali & Tippu Sultan, states that contrary to popular belief, 40,000 Christians were not kept manacled in the dungeons of Seringapatam.” Joyson Noel Holla at me! 15:54, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, a few did take advantage of the siege and escaped to Coorg and Kerala. This is mentioned twice in the article, both in the “Post-migration era and Captivity” section and the “Demographics” section. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 15:54, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In 1836-7, when the political situation in Portugal was in turmoil" - at least link "in turmoil" to something appropriate, even if you don't elaborate on what the turmoil is.
Linked to this section of the "History of Portugal (1834–1910)" article, as there is no separate article for this turmoil. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 15:54, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Historically, the Mangalorean Catholic diet was completely Vegetarian" - Vegetarian is not a proper noun.
Not so sure about that in Indian English. Johnbod (talk) 17:44, 19 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed it. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 15:54, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • There a number of other minor issues not mentioned above, like it's/its and missing/extra commas, that require a copyeditor's attention.

--Magic♪piano 17:37, 19 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Opened a request here. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 15:54, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Excuse my interjections! Johnbod (talk) 17:44, 19 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Not a problem, dude! Any suggestion is welcome. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 15:54, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Good work so far. Magic♪piano 21:43, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good pending completion of copyedit. Magic♪piano 21:05, 24 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Article has been copy-edited by User:Pol430. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 21:45, 25 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Well, the copyedit improved things to some extent; however, considering the number of further issues I found, I can only weakly support; I think the prose would still benefit from a more thorough (and deeper) going over. (I also tagged two things that should be clarified.) Magic♪piano 16:54, 27 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the copyedit! I have clarified the para:
Joyson Noel Holla at me! 09:34, 29 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Images This may have some relevance to this article Fasach Nua (talk) 18:46, 28 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Added my Strongly Oppose vote to this ridiculous proposition. Joyson Noel Holla at me! 10:03, 29 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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