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I would change “Returning home he was a lot different looking, he was a lot thinner and quieter man.” to “Returning home he was a lot different looking, he became a thinner and quieter man.” To avoid using “a lot” twice in one sentence. I also noticed that you switch between past and present tense in “One of the agreements upon release was that Ai was not able to leave China for a year. Which really hurts him and how he does a lot of business across the country.” I would make sure to change this to just past tense to make it easier to read and coincide with the rest of the article. Also, instead of having the period after “year” in the previous sentence, I would change that to a comma to avoid having an incomplete sentence.
Great post and insightful perspectives on a great master of the art. I wish the article was bolder with more references to other wiki articles like the one you did for the university of poli sci. has potential. Jaharialayeart (talk) 20:25, 16 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
You have good information, however, you don't include information on Chinese art which is what is most important. Also, make sure to add your references to give credit to the sources you used. Mariamelia Zaragoza (talk) 22:58, 22 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Good start to the information. I think you can add a little more info. there is a way to link your citations directly and create the bibliography for you under the cite tab in the sandbox. Adellert (talk) 02:30, 23 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Hello! I think the information you added was very interesting! However, I think when speaking about Ai Weiwei for the first time, maybe add his entire name. The only way I knew who you were talking about is because we learned about him in class, otherwise another viewer of this article may not know whom you are speaking about when reading the name "Ai". ChloeM99 (talk) 21:00, 23 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
