User talk:Valgall/sandbox

Peer Review

General Pacheco Article

1. I think researching into the influence of industries is a very good and unique perspective to take.
2. A good sub section could be municipal information as you discussed.
3. I think you have a huge expanse of areas you can research, which is great! You should be able to find a lot of information on healthcare, education, transport, geography and the influence of motor companies. These can help expand your topic to learn more about your area. I am not sure if you want to zone your article in or keep it broad. If you want to zone in on a few topics, I think healthcare would be a great one except it would fall more in the sector category. In that case, my overall suggestion would be to focus on one of the categories that are separate from your sector of healthcare but still count as area. For instance, education geography and motor companies.
4. More things you can research on for areas: demographics, history of the city, economy and trade, foreign relations. I suggest doing a lot of preliminary research and letting the research lead your synthesis.
5. This way, you can find information that you find interesting specifically and expand on that! You have a very broad direction you can go here so I think you can just burry yourself in research right now to find it.
   

Health Campaign Article

1. For this article, I would suggest narrowing down your research to focussing on just Argentina. This way you learn all about the healthcare policies and issues in your area, which would be great for your PE. You can focus on Argentina as well as broader topics that encompass the topic as a whole.
2. You have good ideas on talking about infectious diseases and public health!
3. I really like your idea of discussing NGOs and health campaign's contributions to healthcare. Some questions to get you started thinking about this- are NGOs taking the role the government should play? Are health campaigns teaching about healthcare or are they just providing it as a band-aid solution? Are they trying to FIX the problem or just providing support? Who is responsible for fixing the problem?
4. I also really liked your points on participation. Some question to ask for your research- do these orgs or health campaigns hold some sort of power? By participating, are citizens gaining or loosing anything? What is the intent or purpose of these orgs?
5. The route you take with this article is really dependent on your next steps of research. I suggest finding a paper that you are really interested in and then trying to expand on that subject. What you end up writing about should be fueled by the research you do! You have a great starting point.
   

Bibliography

1. All of your articles seem to be about health. This is why it is tempting to suggest that you add a health section to the General Pacheco article and follow this, however that will be too close to your sector. Thus, I suggest using these sources somehow as part of your health campaign article and instead finding more general topic articles for your area. Above were some suggestions on things you can look up to get you started.
2. These sources do look very scholarly and reliable. They are all from scholarly journals. I suggest you can delve into other forms of sources as well to broaden your insights.
   

Overall you have a great starting point for both articles. Be sure to expand on your research to find your direction for writing! Good luck! Anikakalra (talk)