User talk:Mpsims1580/Small Wars Manual

Carefully proofread. "Heavily" is one of those unnecessary words. Watch for adverbs; if the word you've chosen needs an adverb to amplify it, choose a word that conveys more precisely what you mean. Dr. Bricker — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rbricker (talk • contribs) 22:31, 21 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Sophie Monsibais Peer Review

Looks good so far! Double check words like postwar and reorientate. I'm not sure if those are proper words/written properly. Otherwise, I think it could just use some condensing to make it simpler to read like shorter sentences and eliminating unnecessary modifiers like "rather". Smonsibais (talk) 16:29, 22 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]