User talk:Lhr mizz/sandbox

Hello!

I am peer reviewing your article Xenia. Overall, the article is very well done. You did a great job pulling together information and making it easy for the reader to follow the article. I just have a few comments for you:

The "Overview" section has only one citation, which I believe you put in, but the rest of the section is not linked to a source. If this information came from you, it would be great to have a source with it. (I know it's entirely possible that this information was in the article is not from you, as I've run into that with my own article)

I like the different examples you give in the section "In the Iliad", which allows the reader to pick out the different forms of xenia. However, the wording that is used in the last bit about Hephaistos is a bit confusing. Re-wording it might make it easier for those who haven't read the Iliad to understand what occurred.

While the section "In the Odyssey" has a lot of good information, again there are very few sources attached to the information. In addition to this, it is a little more difficult to sift through the information when it is all packed together like it is. Perhaps you could split it up like the "Iliad" section to make it more accessible to the reader. I also did not follow what was meant when the "formula" was mentioned at the end of the first paragraph. Maybe that could be explained a bit more to clarify the point.

The "In the Argonautika" section looks good. There is a space missing between the last two sentences. Also the sentence "This is a clear violation of xenia and the Argos become worried when they reach their next destination later on in Book 2, when the Argos are on an island after a storm caused by Zeus." is a little unclear. While there are several instances of xenia mentioned, it may be a good idea to explain why it is (or is not) proper xenia.

In the "Political Alliances" section, make sure you have quotation marks around each quote, and on each quote within a quote. Technically the quotes within a quote should have one mark (') instead of two ("). Also in the second paragraph, Odysseus is misspelled. The information in this section is really good, but I wonder if it's possible to find (and point out) the connection between these uses of xenia and the use of xenia in mythology.

Again, it is a really great article! Let me know if any of this doesn't make sense and I'll try to rephrase:) Good luck! Jjdgzd (talk) 21:45, 1 May 2016 (UTC)