User talk:LAmadefairy/New Orleans Historic Voodoo Museum
Great article
[edit]The article is great I only have one suggestion, which is to fix the wording in the activities section to make it more neutral. Not too many corrections need to be made but try taking out any indications of a personal opinion from the article.
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[edit]This is off to a good start, but you are cutting yourself short with each section. Don't be in such a rush. Your Lead also gives you some other things to consider in the body of the paragraph, like an actual description of the museum and what Vodou Art looks like. You're also missing a lot of citations. While the first sentence of the History section is cited, nothing else is, suggesting that all that information is common knowledge, which it is not.
Watch the tone of your writing, too. This is not a tourist brochure; it's an encyclopedia article. Keep it formal and neutral. jtodd1973 15:48, 9 March 2021 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jtodd1973 (talk • contribs)