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This Wikipedia page is mainly about the Education System in China and Government's Spending on Education,it covers a little bit about family spending on education. With the development of research in various fields, there are not many introductions or statistics related to China's education system and government on education expenditures. As a country where the popularization rate of compulsory education has reached 94%, it is worth exploring and tracing the history of education development in China.

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Here is the 5 sources I will use for the Wikipedia article.

1. Universalizing Nine-Year Compulsory Education for Poverty Reduction in Rural China by Tiedao Zhang and Zhao Minxia in 2006

Citation: Zhang, T., & Minxia, Z. (2006). Universalizing nine-year compulsory education for poverty reduction in rural china. International Review of Education, 52(3–4), 261–286. https://doi.org/10.1007/s11159-006-0011-z

This article mainly talks about the changes of the nine-year compulsory education implemented in China to the poor population and poor areas. Through the establishment of an inspection system for the implementation of relevant policies, regular evaluation of government performance, etc., provide sufficient educational opportunities for all school-age children in poverty-stricken areas. Since 1990, three major strategies have been adopted to support the popularization of compulsory education in poverty-stricken areas: poverty reduction, mobilization of community resources, and measures to incorporate international aid. In this article, the government's expenditures and the benefits of various measures to popularize compulsory education in poverty-stricken areas are mainly emphasized, including the reduction of illiteracy rate, the increase of enrollment rate, and all aspects of expenditures for the construction of rural schools, etc. The author also analyzes the problems of social development, education quality and fairness caused by regional differences.

2. Public education spending and private substitution in urban China by Cheng Yuan, Lei Zhang in 2015

Citation: Yuan, C., & Zhang, L. (2015). Public education spending and private substitution in urban China. Journal of Development Economics, 115, 124–139. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.jdeveco.2015.02.006 
This article analyzes the relationship between the decrease in tutoring expenditures of single-child families from middle schools and elementary schools and the increase in national basic education public expenditures. The data in this article comes from the 2002-2006 Compulsory Education (Primary and Middle School) Children's Family Survey, so there is a certain degree of credibility, but it is inevitable that there will be some under-reporting when filling in the data. The article also focuses on the analysis of the changes in the cost of extracurricular tutoring from 2002 to 2006.

3. 甘肃：农村幼儿园精准建设项目补齐学前教育“短板” by WWW. GOV. cn in 2015

Citation: 甘肃：农村幼儿园精准建设项目补齐学前教育“短板” _图片_新闻_中国政府网(2015). Archived by 23, Oct, 2021, 从 http://www.gov.cn/xinwen/2015-09/12/content_2930058.htm

This webpage tells about the Chinese government's education support for one of the poorest provinces in China in the southwest region. Through the use of large and small data to show the government's support for Gansu kindergarten education. Although kindergartens do not belong to the nine-year compulsory education stage, it can also be seen that the government attaches great importance to school construction. In the web page, only relevant data is displayed, and there is no other more in-depth information. Although it is the data of the central government portal website, the credibility is high. But there are no other examples or detailed analysis.

4. Child Nutrition In Rural China: Free-lunch project ensures nutritious lunches (Video) Citation: Child Nutrition In Rural China: Free-lunch project ensures nutritious lunches(2016). Archived by 2, Nov, 2021, 从 https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W1I-_huCmQY

The video uses a family in a poor county in Zhejiang as an example. The children were brought up by the elderly and their parents went out to work. Emphasizes the balanced mix and nutritious meals for school lunches. It highlights the government's support for rural schools, not only focusing on learning, but also concerned about the healthy development of students. The focus of the video is on the health and nutrition of the students' meals rather than the free lunch provided by the government, which may be a bit different from the article. But you can also withdraw the quality of the free lunch.

5. 报告显示中小学生补习班年均费用12000元，最高达30万

Citation: 报告显示中小学生补习班年均费用12000元，最高达30万. Archived by 17 Oct, 2021, 从 https://baijiahao.baidu.com/s?id=1618713750521066923&wfr=spider&for=pc

This article not only covers the history of China's policy on "burden reduction", but also tells about the cost and time spent on extracurricular tutoring classes for students in recent years. It also covers situations where students lack sleep and stress due to extracurricular tutoring classes. The article was published in 2018, so it does not include the latest "double reduction" policy is a fly in the ointment.

Peer Feedback to others

1. It's a good introduction that you stated the article topic concisely, and summarization of the major points. But, since there is no body paragraph yet, I cannot tell if the information included in the introduction presents in body paragraphs or not. Try to use some media like pictures and videos in your Wikipedia to help explain. The types of sources you are using are quite lack. Try to find sources from different types of website if you could.

2. There is a topic sentence in the Topic Paragraph part, however, you didn't list out each major point that you are going to present in the body paragraph, which makes the article seems lacking or orders. In the body paragraphs, try to connect your understanding with your finding together. It is good you use multi-types of sources.

Peer review Positives:

The layout of your article is extremely clear, with defined and separated headings. The 'contents' list is very helpful in navigating your article, it also shows good knowledge of wikipedia itself. Likewise the inclusion of the image which shows the categories of education in China. References are from a number of various sources meaning variating opinions are discussed about your topic. Additionally, the use of the number system when referencing again shows skill when using wikipedia. Detailed level of research is shown through the vast number of sources, images and links to other sites of information. Your introduction briefly describes the articles aim, whilst outlining everything you will be discussing.it makes it extremely simple for the reader to grasp. Points which are made are neutral and most sources are factual information.

What could be improved:

Your article mainly reads well, just in a few sections there are SPAG errors, for instance in the third line of your opening paragraph. Additionally, in your 'what did the government do' paragraph- the part regarding what the project did (reference 6) does not grammatically make sense. maybe try to add different point of views, from varying sources for example. Overall the article is very good, after reading I understand the topic and have a good level of knowledge surrounding it, maybe just proof read. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lawra1sussex (talk • contribs) 16:57, 1 December 2021 (UTC)

PEER FEEDBACK: According to the main topic, the writer shows a reasonable part of the education system and government distribution of financing education. However, the budget education is missing out and how's the government commitment to fulfill the education need through the budget. Although the information is there, when it talks about spending and resource, it would be very valuable if the writer used statistics and pictures to show the data. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ppmoi (talk • contribs) 21:00, 3 December 2021 (UTC)

Feedback to Peer Reviews: Comments I will address: Thanks for the comments of SPAG error and another sentence that does not grammatically make sense. I will scan through the whole article and correct the SPAG error first. In the other sentence, I might just correct it to make it understandable since it helps to make 'what did the government do' more persuasive.

Comments I will address: To give a picture or statistic graph to show the spending of government. I don't think it will help the essay since they are all separately. I understand that I could use a pie chart to show the government's spending. But since the time I mentioned in the article was only one of the most important periods. I don't think it will help to look entirety.