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Each fact was properly referenced from what seemed to be a good, reliable source. (WHAT MADE THEM, GOOD, RELIABLE SOURCES? WERE THEY RECENT?) Everything mentioned was related to the article, which was about the Sheraton Dallas Hotel. (WERE ANY FACTS OVER- or UNDER-REPRESENTED) Nothing about the article was biased; it had a neutral tone. (HOW DID YOU MAKE THE EVALUATION THAT IT WAS NEUTRAL?) All sources cited was also neutral. (WERE ANY OF THESE PRIMARY OR SECONDARY SOURCES) All links to citations were working.

Also, this training exercise was really helpful in helping to understand how the whole editing process goes. I definitely feel as though I have a better understanding now.

I think the claustrophobia article is very well written and each fact presented was relevant to the topic at hand. However, I think the symptoms section could be revisited. They could possibly even add in more indications of when someone is claustrophobic and is having an "episode" or "attack." Also, not every source has a hyperlink. FOR THIS EXERCISE, YOU NEEDED TO PROVIDE A PROPOSED BIBLIOGRAPHY AND MORE DETAILS ON YOUR PLANS FOR REVISING SECTIONS.

Add to "use of virtual reality distraction" section:

1. Participant met DSM-IV criteria for two specific phobias, situational type (claustrophobia) and natural environment type (storms). She suffered from fear of closed spaces, such as buses, elevators, crowds, and planes, which began after a crowd trampled her in a shopping mall 12 years prior. In response to this event, she developed the specific phobia, natural environment type (storms) because the cause of the stampede was the racket of a big storm. Participant was assigned to two individual VR environments to distinguish the levels of difficulty in a "claustrophobic" environment, with one setting being a house and the other being an elevator. There was a total of eight sessions that were carried out over the span of 30 days, with each session lasting between 35-45 minutes. The results from this treatment proved to be successful in reducing the fear of enclosed spaces and additionally improved over the course of 3 months.

Add to "treatments" section?

1. CPAP therapy
   1. Nasal continuous positive airway pressure is a non-surgical treatment commonly used to alleviate obstructive sleep apnea. CPAP therapy involves the use of a mask that covers the nose and mouth. Although treatment is found to be effective, it is unknown whether the application of the CPAP mask generates feelings of claustrophobia thereby averting use of the treatment.

Add to diagnosis:

1. Diagnosis of claustrophobia usually transpires from a consultation about other anxiety-related conditions.
2. Certain criteria have to be met to be diagnosed with specific phobias:
   1. an interminable obstructive or excessive fear caused by the existence or anticipation of a specific situation
   2. anxiety response when stimulus is exhibited; can result in panic attacks in adults or, for children, an outburst, clinging, crying, etc.
   3. acknowledgment by adult patients that their fear stems from the anticipated threat or danger
   4. engaging in procedures to evade dreaded object or situation, or proneness to face the situation but with discomfort or anxiety
   5. the person's evasion of the object or situation impedes with everyday life and relationships
   6. the phobia is continuous, usually for 6 months or longer
   7. symptoms cannot be ascribed to other underlying mental conditions, such as obsessive-compulsive disorder (OCD) or post-traumatic stress disorder (PTSD)

Use of word "claustrophobics" sort of repetitive? Maybe replace with "claustrophobes" instead?

Add to symptoms:

1. Claustrophobia is classified as an anxiety disorder. Symptoms generally develop during childhood or adolescence.
2. Being enclosed or thinking about being enclosed a confined space can trigger fears of not being able to breathe properly, running out of oxygen, and anxiety of being restricted. It is not always the small space that triggers these emotions, but it's moreso the fear of the possibilities of what could happen while confined to that area.
3. When anxiety levels start to reach a certain level, the person may start to experience:
   • sweating and/or chills
   • accelerated heart rate and a rise in blood pressure
   • dizziness, fainting spells, and lightheadedness
   • dry mouth
   • hyperventilation
   • hot flashes
   • shaking or trembling and a sense of "butterflies" in the stomach
   • nausea
   • headache
   • numbness
   • a choking sensation
   • tightness in the chest/chest pain and difficulty breathing
   • an urge to use the bathroom
   • confusion or disorientation
   • fear of harm or illness