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Thelma Pressman

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The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk)

... that Thelma Pressman opened the first microwave cooking school in the United States?

Reviewed: Ronnia Fornstedt ([1])

Created/expanded by Yoninah (talk). Self nom at 20:10, 7 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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Hook

Length, format, content rules – --Antidiskriminator (talk) 13:36, 8 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Source – --Antidiskriminator (talk) 13:36, 8 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Interest – --Antidiskriminator (talk) 13:36, 8 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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Article

Length – --Antidiskriminator (talk) 13:34, 8 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Vintage – --Antidiskriminator (talk) 13:34, 8 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Sourcing (V, RS, BLP) – --Antidiskriminator (talk) 14:33, 8 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Neutrality – --Antidiskriminator (talk) 14:33, 8 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Plagiarism/close paraphrasing – --Antidiskriminator (talk) 14:15, 8 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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Comments/discussion:

I think that it might be better to add a year when this school was founded. Then it could look like:
ALT1: ... that in 1969 Thelma Pressman opened the first microwave cooking school in the United States? --Antidiskriminator (talk) 13:39, 8 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- ALT1 is fine by me. Yoninah (talk) 20:24, 9 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Just suggestion about possible close paraphrasing?: "to develop recipes, design cookware," might be close paraphrasing.--Antidiskriminator (talk) 14:15, 8 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed. Yoninah (talk) 20:24, 9 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
--Antidiskriminator (talk) 14:33, 8 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]