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Albert, Alfred and Chris Schlechten

The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk)

... that Albert, Alfred and Chris Schlechten were members of a family noted for their photography of Montana, notably the Bozeman, Montana area and Yellowstone National Park?

Reviewed: Flustra foliacea [1]

Hook

Length, format, content rules – Hook is okay but I strongly suggest using ALT1 instead. Gamaliel (talk) 19:36, 10 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Source –
Interest –
Image suitability, if applicable – I took the liberty of adding a 1905 photo to the article and this DYK submission because an article like this is really enhanced with a pic. Gamaliel (talk) 19:34, 10 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

It was a gem, but it IS copyrighted by the Museum of the Rockies, so I don't think we can use it here (darn!). BUT: I think we might be able to still use it in the article with a fair use rationale. Montanabw^(talk) 22:43, 10 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

ALT hooks, if proposed –

I suggest a tighter wording for the hook: ... that Albert, Alfred and Chris Schlechten were a family noted for their photography of the Bozeman, Montana area and Yellowstone National Park?
and an alternate fun hook: ... that photographer Chris Schlechten was expelled from Montana State College for creating a spoof annual which replaced a photo of the basketball team with a row of Butterfinger candy bars? Gamaliel (talk) 19:18, 10 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

ALT 2, version 2:

... that photographer Chris Schlechten was briefly expelled from Montana State College for helping create a spoof annual which included the basketball team portrayed as a row of Butterfinger candy bars? Montanabw^(talk) 21:10, 10 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Either is fine with me. However, I made a couple suggested edits to the "fun" hook to clarify the nuance (the ENTIRE annual had spoof photos throughout!). Whichever is preferred is fine with me! Montanabw^(talk) 20:01, 10 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Good call, my sentence didn't make it clear that the whole thing was a spoof. Gamaliel (talk) 21:07, 10 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Mine just made it 219 characters, so chopped, and put your original back in for comparison. Montanabw^(talk) 21:10, 10 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Article

Length – Gamaliel (talk) 19:15, 10 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Vintage – Gamaliel (talk) 19:36, 10 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Sourcing (V, RS, BLP) – Gamaliel (talk) 19:36, 10 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Neutrality – Gamaliel (talk) 19:36, 10 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Plagiarism/close paraphrasing – Gamaliel (talk) 19:36, 10 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
copyvio (files) – Gamaliel (talk) 19:36, 10 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Obvious faults in prose, structure, formatting –

Comments/discussion:

Prose isn't perfect and it would be best if the author made another editing pass today. I corrected a few items and it looks sufficient. I wish there were more sources, but this is a pretty obscure topic and I doubt we'll be able to dig up any more without a Wikipedian in Residence at the Museum of the Rockies. But it's a great topic and there's enough to work with for a short article, and the yearbook incident provides enough color to keep things interesting. Gamaliel (talk) 19:40, 10 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments and pass-through. Not too bad for something I whipped up in about 30 minutes... will do another run-through, but sources are a challenge. To me the Yellowstone stuff is particularly fascinating, given the transportation challenges of taking an 11 x 14 field camera into Yellowstone at the turn of the century. ;-) Montanabw^(talk) 20:04, 10 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]