Template:Did you know nominations/Zackray

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 23:44, 26 May 2020 (UTC)

Zackray

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... that with his victory at The Big House 9, Zackray became the first Japanese player to win a premier-tier Super Smash Bros. tournament held outside of Japan? Source: Here. Zackray's section is at the bottom.
- ALT1:... that with his victory at The Big House 9, Super Smash Bros. Ultimate player Sota "Zackray" Okada became the first Japanese player to win a premier-tier tournament held outside of Japan? Source: same as above

Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Hans Herbert Jöris

Created by The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk). Self-nominated at 23:31, 6 May 2020 (UTC).

New enough to mainspace, long enough. Each paragraph has a citation; the source checks out and is included in the right places. While it's good to go, TheSquirrelConspiracy, have you considered maybe breaking up the two big paragraphs in the body a bit? As to the wording of the hook, that's kind of a promoter's choice. Someone not familiar with competitive Smash will definitely be surprised that Japanese players haven't had as much success as a casual might think. Raymie (t • c) 06:03, 7 May 2020 (UTC)

Thanks Raymie. I structured it as one paragraph per PGRU season, because it creates a natural flow of tournaments -> ranking -> paragraph break -> repeat, but I can look into breaking it up a bit more. The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk) 07:11, 7 May 2020 (UTC)

Oops, my ping was wrong! Yeah, per PGRU season makes sense, but it also needs to be broken up a bit. As I noted with the Tweek page, these articles quickly read rather dense because they are about tournament result after tournament result. Raymie (t • c) 07:40, 7 May 2020 (UTC)

No worries Raymie. That's what compulsive watchlist checking is for. I've broken each season into two paragraphs. I'll go ahead and fix Maister (gamer) too before you tell me the same thing a third time in that nomination . The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk) 07:53, 7 May 2020 (UTC)