Template:Did you know nominations/The World Is Bardo

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The result was: promoted by Allen3 ^talk 11:36, 9 April 2015 (UTC)

The World Is Bardo

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... that in March 2015, hundreds of thousands of Tunisians marched in Bardo to protest terrorism by Islamic State of Iraq and the Levant and give condolences to victims of the Bardo National Museum attack?

ALT1:... that in March 2015, thousands of Tunisians marched in Tunis with the chant, "Tunisia is free! Terrorism out!"?
Reviewed: Craig v. Radford

Created by Csisc (talk). Nominated by George Ho (talk) at 19:51, 31 March 2015 (UTC).

I find the hooks interesting and factual, and I like the topic, but the article needs copyedits for grammar before it is ready for DYK. Please give it a good read. I'll make a few changes right now so you can see the problem for yourself. Viriditas (talk) 01:19, 7 April 2015 (UTC)

Preliminary copyedits complete.[1] I'll finish reviewing the rest of the article (and the hooks) when I return in several hours. Thanks. Viriditas (talk) 01:35, 7 April 2015 (UTC)

Note: the article was an orphan, as you forgot to add incoming links. I've just remedied the situation.[2] Viriditas (talk) 10:52, 7 April 2015 (UTC)

Support ALT1. Original hook is too long and goes over the character count limit. "Hundreds of thousands" is potentially hyperbole, as the sources range from hundreds of thousands to tens of thousands, to just thousands. Without good data, we should be conservative in our approach, so I've changed the hook to just "thousands". Having covered and written about many different protests, I feel that this is the best approach as the media isn't keen to get the numbers right. I've also changed "slogan" to "chant" in the hook, as you had that backwards. Per the sources, the slogan is "The World is Bardo", while the chant is "Tunisia is free, terrorism out". I can't see the purpose of including the French here. I also changed "Bardo" to "Tunis". Review: the article is new, long enough ( 1890 characters), and within policy (neutral, cites sources, no close paraphrasing detected); the ALT1 hook is 160 characters, interesting, accurate, and neutral. Viriditas (talk) 11:30, 7 April 2015 (UTC)