Template:Did you know nominations/Nano Riantiarno

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The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk) 06:41, 25 August 2011 (UTC)

Nano Riantiarno

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... that Nano Riantiarno wrote "operas" about white snakes, cockroaches, and constipation?

Created by Crisco 1492 (talk). Self nom at 13:04, 20 August 2011 (UTC)

Size/referencing/etc. look good. However, I'm a little iffy about the hook - are the Cockroach Opera and the Constipation Opera actually about these subjects? Isn't it just the titles? Roscelese (talk ⋅ contribs) 16:55, 20 August 2011 (UTC)

Reviewed: Sanzo Nosaka

Metaphorically, but the context is not in the article. How about ALT1 "... that Nano Riantiarno's "opera" titles include white snakes, cockroaches, and constipation?"

Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:08, 20 August 2011 (UTC)

It seems less syntactically and semantically pleasing (I think it's the irregular use of "include"). Something like:

ALT2: ... that Nano Riantiarno's works include the Cockroach Opera, the White Snake Opera, and the Constipation Opera?

--Roscelese (talk ⋅ contribs) 03:01, 21 August 2011 (UTC)

Having Opera so many times seems pointless. How about ALT3 ... that Nano Riantiarno's works include the Cockroach, White Snake, and Constipation "operas"? Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:26, 21 August 2011 (UTC)

I think that's good. Roscelese (talk ⋅ contribs) 04:55, 21 August 2011 (UTC)

I've removed excessive "the"s from ALT3. Crisco 1492 (talk) 06:14, 21 August 2011 (UTC)