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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:11, 29 April 2018 (UTC)

Murder of Simon Dale

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Created by Violetriga (talk). Self-nominated at 13:21, 24 March 2018 (UTC).

  • I'm unsure if "might have" is redundant in the original hook. violet/riga [talk] 13:22, 24 March 2018 (UTC)
  • New, in time, long enough, sourced, inline hook citations check out, no apparent copyvios, QPQ done. Violetriga, I would suggest you describe Dale as English in the lead, and make a point of stating where the murder took place; the West Mercia Police are mentioned (but where's that?), and almost as an afterthought, but there's nothing else in the lead. --Usernameunique (talk) 00:09, 31 March 2018 (UTC)
  • I've further expanded the lead and added an infobox. violet/riga [talk] 22:25, 21 April 2018 (UTC)
  • Thank you. Restoring tick. Yoninah (talk) 22:51, 21 April 2018 (UTC)
  • Back again. If there's no evidence that the gold bars even existed, I don't think we should go with this hook. Let's think of something else that's verified. How about:
  • ALT3: ... that Simon Dale lived in only one room and the kitchen of his 50-room Hopton Heath mansion, where he was found bludgeoned to death in 1987? Yoninah (talk) 23:05, 21 April 2018 (UTC)
  • I think that we're covered with that wording but I'm happy to go with ALT3 if that's your preference. violet/riga [talk] 23:15, 21 April 2018 (UTC)
  • OK. We need another reviewer for ALT3, and then the promoter can decide. Pinging @Usernameunique:. Yoninah (talk) 23:23, 21 April 2018 (UTC)
  • Thanks for looking at this, Yoninah. violetriga, first, linking to a Google Group isn't great. The original source is archived here, and should be linked (and referenced) as such. Second, saying he "only" lived in two rooms is too strong. The source says "Dale lived mainly in the kitchen, sleeping upstairs in a four-poster bed. The rest of the house was half-empty". The hook should be qualified slightly (e.g., Simon Dale spent most of his time in one room...) to reflect the source. --Usernameunique (talk) 01:38, 22 April 2018 (UTC)
  • Thanks for finding the archive link - I'm much happier using that as the source. violet/riga [talk] 09:44, 22 April 2018 (UTC)
How about:
  • ALT3b: ... that Simon Dale lived mainly in one room and the kitchen of his 50-room Hopton Heath mansion, where he was found bludgeoned to death?
I still like ALT0 but this works. violet/riga [talk] 09:44, 22 April 2018 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the ping Yoninah. Added an inline citation, so this is all set. --Usernameunique (talk) 02:08, 29 April 2018 (UTC)