The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Rjjiiitalk 03:35, 16 February 2024 (UTC)
current cleanup banner in the article will need to be fixed before this article can be promoted at DYK. Additionally, I'm not sure the second hook is good. Women with uncomplicated pregnancy may not face any dangers due to lack of medical care. The source would need to meet WP:MEDRS. (t · c) buidhe 08:17, 15 December 2023 (UTC)
ALT0 might be too short, I'd suggest something like "classified as MCDs" rather than "are MCDs" Orchastrattor (talk) 04:39, 21 December 2023 (UTC)
First let me say that this is a really important article, and I thank you for adding it to Wikipedia. I've done some additional cleanup on the grammar. Regarding the alts, I've struck the originals re: the comments above and am suggesting slight modifications below.
The nominator, Kristudent194, has not edited Wikipedia since Dec. 19. Unless the user returns, or someone is willing to take over this nomination, I am closing this as abandoned. Z1720 (talk) 15:07, 24 January 2024 (UTC)
@Z1720:, I would be willing to take it over if someone wants to review. Mary Mark Ockerbloom (talk) 20:35, 24 January 2024 (UTC)
@Z1720:, I believe so, I just did a few minor edits and rephrased the opening sentence so that it uses the title of the article. Mary Mark Ockerbloom (talk) 19:15, 25 January 2024 (UTC)
ALT1a invites the obvious question "more dangerous than what"? so obviously needs clarification. Gatoclass (talk) 05:55, 3 February 2024 (UTC)
Actually I think that makes it more "hooky". Mary Mark Ockerbloom (talk) 17:58, 11 February 2024 (UTC)
ALTa looks fine, except that the figure of 36% is not in the article. Other than that, there are still a couple of in-text tags that need addressing. Gatoclass (talk) 06:04, 3 February 2024 (UTC)
@Narutolovehinata5 and Z1720: Thanks for catching that, and for your patience. I have now fact-checked and cited all of the data given in the Wikipedia article. There were a couple of places where secondary sources had rounded up numbers from the march of dimes reports, so I cited the originals as better numbers. MOD gives "34.9" as the percentage of counties in 2020, and "35.6" in Table 2 in its 2022 report. The BMJ, also cited, states "Some 1119 of the nation’s 3143 counties are maternity care deserts, a 2% increase since the 2020 report." Given that, I would like to propose the following instead:
ALT2 : ... that the percentage of counties in the United States that are classified as maternity care deserts increased from 34.9% in 2020 to 35.6% in 2022?Mary Mark Ockerbloom (talk) 01:52, 11 February 2024 (UTC)
Not a review, but since the interesting thing in this hook is the term "maternity care desert" itself, I would keep it short and go with a single figure, like the original hook. (I disagree with Orchastrattor here; shorter is usually better for DYK purposes.) --Paul_012 (talk) 13:36, 11 February 2024 (UTC)
What Paul said. Gatoclass (talk) 13:55, 11 February 2024 (UTC)
If we use a more accurate number, as given below, ALTa could pass as:
ALTa2 looks fine, except that you don't appear to have a source for the total number of US counties (3143 according to the article). Gatoclass (talk) 11:58, 14 February 2024 (UTC)
@Gatoclass: Thanks for catching that, I've fixed ALTa2. Table 2 of the 2022 report shows a total of 3,142 counties. Mary Mark Ockerbloom (talk) 13:29, 15 February 2024 (UTC)
current cleanup banner in the article will need to be fixed before this article can be promoted at DYK. Additionally, I'm not sure the second hook is good. Women with uncomplicated pregnancy may not face any dangers due to lack of medical care. The source would need to meet WP:MEDRS. (t · c) buidhe 08:17, 15 December 2023 (UTC)
First let me say that this is a really important article, and I thank you for adding it to Wikipedia. I've done some additional cleanup on the grammar. Regarding the alts, I've struck the originals re: the comments above and am suggesting slight modifications below.
The nominator, Kristudent194, has not edited Wikipedia since Dec. 19. Unless the user returns, or someone is willing to take over this nomination, I am closing this as abandoned. Z1720 (talk) 15:07, 24 January 2024 (UTC)
ALTa2 verified. Thank you for taking the trouble to rescue this important nom Mary! Gatoclass (talk) 14:02, 15 February 2024 (UTC)