Template:Did you know nominations/Lucio Norberto Mansilla
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The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:58, 7 May 2012 (UTC)
Lucio Norberto Mansilla
[edit]... that Argentine military Lucio Norberto Mansilla died during the 1871 yellow fever in Buenos Aires?
- Reviewed: Hossam el-Hamalawy
Created/expanded by Cambalachero (talk). Self nom at 04:10, 30 April 2012 (UTC)
Expansion is verified, the hook accepted by AGF. Leszek Jańczuk (talk) 20:01, 30 April 2012 (UTC)
I'm sorry, but the hook does not make grammatical sense. Mansilla was an "Argentine military" what? Should there be a rank (e.g., Colonel, General), or a word like "leader" or "officer"? There's something missing, and the hook cannot be passed until we have a new or improved version of it. There's also a problem with the final link: while that article is talking about a number of epidemics over a span of years, by using 1871, this is talking about a specific epidemic in a specific year, and the word "epidemic" (or its equivalent) should be included. BlueMoonset (talk) 17:31, 3 May 2012 (UTC)
- ALT1... that Argentine general Lucio Norberto Mansilla died during the 1871 epidemic of yellow fever in Buenos Aires?
- Is this one better? Cambalachero (talk) 15:36, 6 May 2012 (UTC)
Yes. The new hook is fine. As before, off-line non-English source is AGF for hook. I've struck out the old hook, and this nomination is ready to go. BlueMoonset (talk) 16:36, 6 May 2012 (UTC)