Template:Did you know nominations/Ellen Lowell

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The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk) 15:31, 12 February 2012 (UTC)

Ellen Lowell

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~~... that Ellen Lowell's son, Dan Stewart was rapidly aged to the point that their portrayers had a one year age gap?~~

Comment: Changes to the hook are more than welcome.

Created/expanded by Frickative (talk), Raintheone (talk). Nominated by Raintheone (talk) at 00:53, 2 February 2012 (UTC)

Reviewed: Melky Goeslaw

Age, length OK. Well-referenced; no overt close paraphrasing seen, other than a few words here and there attributed to sources. But the hook is a little confusing for those of us who aren't familiar with the serial. How about:
ALT1: ... that As the World Turns heroine Ellen Lowell was the first major character in any serial to have an illegitimate child? Yoninah (talk) 22:48, 11 February 2012 (UTC)

I like the alternative hook and prefer it. I did think at the time of submission that original hook could have been improved upon. Thank you for taking the review.Rain the 1 23:21, 11 February 2012 (UTC)

Great. Hook ref AGF. ALT1 good to go. Yoninah (talk) 09:24, 12 February 2012 (UTC)