Talk:Warren Antoine Cartier

Attribution

Reference copied from William Rath to Warren Antoine Cartier, See former article's history for a list of contributors. 7&6=thirteen (☎) 20:50, 14 September 2019 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Warren Antoine Cartier/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 18:54, 30 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments - sorry it's taken a while to get to this, have been otherwise engaged...

• Could link Michigan in the lead.
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• "businessman famous for helping to develop the beginnings of" could this be "businessman who helped establish"?
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• "Civil Engineer" Civil engineer.
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• I don't think that "title" entry in the infobox is to be used for his various occupational titles.
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• "Cartier is the third family" was, surely?? And feel to repeat his first name(s) on the first mention here.
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• "is the third family member of Antoine E. Cartier and his wife Eliza Ann of a family of nine." repetitive use of family and what does "third

member" mean? Third child? First child after the two parents?

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• Use the same pipe link for Antoine throughout.
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• "Michigan when" comma after Michigan.
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• "public schools" link as the meaning is different in the UK.
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• "a Varennes business college near" that's an Easter egg link, take "business college" out of it.
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• "at University of Notre Dame in 1884" which was where?
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• "with a Civil Engineering degree" no need for the capitals. Could link.
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• "from Indiana's University of Notre Dame" should have said that first time round!
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• "He then got involved in" bit lacking in encyclopedic tone.
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• "lumbering businesse where" missing an "s"?
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• "where he was promoted to positions" gradually promoted, rather than all in one step I guess?
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• "Ludington State Bank" caption is not useful, perhaps say "Cartier founded Ludington State Bank." or similar?
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• "Bank of Fountain, Mason county" capital County?
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• "Company - president" en-dash.
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• "The city of Ludington embraced the newlyweds in a grand manner showering them" not encyclopedic in tone.
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• "the Republican party," link?
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• "Michigan's 26th Congressional District " any kind of link?
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• "Republican presidential elector" likewise?
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• "city recorder" thrice?
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• "an expansion program" what's one of those?
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• "varsity sports" and those?
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• "asking if he would lhelp." -> "requesting his help."
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• "10 acres (40,000 m2) site" add adj=on to the {{convert}} template.
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• "field andgrandstand" space.
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• "Because of his generosity the field was named the Cartier Field" maybe just merge and say " and it was named Cartier Field in his honor."

or something.

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• " Benevolent & Protective " and, not &.
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• "trustees). [1] " no space before ref.
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• " (B.P.O.E.)" what is that?
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• "Ludington # 736" and that?
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• "married. The home was one " married which was one...
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• "It is currently a" see WP:CURRENTLY.
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• "the Cartiers' home was at" -> "the Cartiers lived in"
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• A lot on Edison which is only tangential to Cartier, suggest trimming that down.
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• "died at 68 in" maybe "died age 68 in" (or in Brit Eng: "died aged 68 in").
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• "kidney failure. He had a kidney ailment" bit repetitive.
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• "Ludington, Michigan next" not sure we need to repeat that Ludington is in Michigan.
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• Nor the name of his (only) wife.
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• What does the watch company in see also have to do with Cartier?
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• Ref 8 incompletely formatted, needs access date/publication date as a minimum.
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• Ref 9, shouldn't p. y be p. 7?
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• Check all newspapers.com sources are listed as newspapers.com, e.g. refs 13, 14 and 15 don't mention it.
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That's all I have. Apologies again for the delay. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:10, 8 October 2021 (UTC)

Thanks for review. I'll get started on it tomorrow after a night's sleep.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:56, 8 October 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:19, 9 October 2021 (UTC)

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