Talk:Tropical Storm Edouard (2008)

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Deletion

The storm has warnings placed, I think the article should be improved not deleted. Hurricaneguy (talk) 22:40, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Personally i agree with this, as i think there is sufficient context to identify the article subject. While the text per se would not be enough to pass, the infobox adds enough information to at least avoid a speedy. Of course PROD and AFD can be considered, but i give those little chance to succeed, let alone a CSD. Excirial^{(Talk,Contribs)} 22:45, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I agree and vote no for deletion. Thegreatdr (talk) 22:58, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I changed it to mid-importance because there are TS warnings along the coast already.Potapych (talk) 23:04, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Now that the article has been expanded, there's no reason for deletion. At the time I had tagged it, the article consisted of only an infobox, thus falling under speedy deletion criteria A3. Juliancolton ^Tropical ^Cyclone 23:32, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I'll add the storm history up to now. ♬♩ Hurricanehink (talk) 01:21, 4 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Importance

for many people living in east texas and west louisiana this article has great importance, including people living in Houston, the 4th largest city in the country.

Houstontowers (talk) 23:17, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Todo

I put it at C-class, but it needs some more impact (damage? flooding?). ♬♩ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:30, 8 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Added storm surge info and rainfall graphic. Thegreatdr (talk) 06:37, 14 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Damage?

Why is there no damage amount avaliable in Texas after Edouard? It certainly didn't cause severe damage, so is there a specific cost of it? —Preceding unsigned comment added by 76.235.204.64 (talk) 23:08, 8 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 14:48, 16 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"August 3, 2008" - don't think you need 2008 since the year is already established in the first sentence.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"However, northerly wind shear halted any further significant intensification" - this implies no strengthening after it became a TS

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Shortly thereafter, the storm made landfall near Gilchrist, Texas" - since this is arguably the most important thing Edouard did, you should have a date for this.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Light rains and relatively strong winds left more than 2,000 without electricity and damaged trees and the roofs of mobile homes." - bit of a run-on. Did the light rains really do this?

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Storm surge caused coastal flooding in eastern Texas. " - we got this from the opening sentence. Unless, does this relate to the damage in Gilchrist?

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

" while portions of a few major roads, such as Interstate 10 were closed" - add comma after I-10

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"and left about 3000,000 people " - is that 3 million or 300,000?

The latter--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Overall, losses from Tropical Storm Edouard " - losses or damage?

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"As a result, the National Hurricane Center initiated advisories on Tropical Depression Five at 1200 UTC on August 3" - that's not true. Ref #4 says NHC initiated advisories on TD 5 at 2100 UTC that day. The TCR confirms it formed earlier, but that's not how you worded it.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"At 0000 UTC on August 4, the National Hurricane Center upgraded the depression to Tropical Storm Edouard" - again, not true. It was at 2200 UTC on August 3 in discussion 2, which you already link!

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

" Later that day, convection briefly decreased around the center, followed by a pre-dawn convective flare up that enveloped its east side, nearly surrounding the center by afternoon as westerly vertical wind shear decreased. " - can you rewrite this? It's a bit jargony, a bit long, and a bit confusing.

Better?--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Why don't you say when the remnant low dissipated?

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Dow Chemical shutdown" - shutdown is two words in this instance.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Any impact in Mississippi?

None--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Minor flooding from the surge traveled up the Calcasieu River to Lake Charles; water flooded a local yacht club" - I'd combine these with a "where waters flooded" for the end bit.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"In the Cameron, Vermilion, and Calcasieu Parishes" - get rid of "the" and make it lowercase "parishes"

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

" though a gust of 62 mph (100 km/h) at Calcasieu Pass" - verb?

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"More than 2,000 people were left without electricity in Cameron Parish as winds downed trees and power lines. Additionally, at least 1,000 customers lost power in Calcasieu Parish for similar reasons." - if they're similar, can you combine the sentences?

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Winds gusted to over 50 mph (80 km/h), peaking at over 70 mph (110 km/h). Furthermore, a wind gust of 71 mph (114 km/h) was reported at Texas Point." - merge, cut redundancies

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Due to the high winds, widespread power outages were reported in Jefferson County. Throughout the county, the winds brought down trees and power lines, and damaged hundreds of homes. At the storm's peak, at least 300,000 customers in Southeastern Texas were without power" - feel like these three sentences could be rewritten as two.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

That's it for now. Have fun with making the changes. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:48, 16 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]