Talk:Tropical Storm Bavi (2015)

Tropical Storm Bavi (2015) has been listed as one of the Natural sciences good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Review: August 23, 2016. (Reviewed version).

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GA Review

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 21:44, 22 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hello JR, I can't remember the last time I reviewed one of your articles. I think it's been a while, so I'm gonna review this one now.--12george1 (talk) 21:44, 22 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Usually there is a reference to the season and a link to it in the lead. For example, "The fifth named storm of the season" or "The eighth tropical cyclone of the annual season", etc.
"as it approached the Mariana Islands." - Why no wikilink for the Mariana Islands?
"The system was subsequently last noted during March 21, as it dissipated over the Philippines." - The Philippines was already linked in the opening sentence
"disturbance impacted eastern Micronesia, with strong to gale force winds" - Wikilink Micronesia
"Marshall Islands were estimated at US$ 2 million, while a fishing vessel" - I think you should change that to 2.1 million. It's only one more decimal, but it makes it easier to understand why the damage toll in the infobox is $2.25 million
"Total property damages within the Mariana Islands, were estimated at around US$150 thousand." - I'm thinking that comma isn't necessary
"twin tropical cyclones in the Pacific Ocean on both side of the equator." - side ---> sides
"The disturbance consisted of a large area of atmospheric convection, which was starting to wrap into the systems developing low level circulation centre." - Something at the end of the sentence isn't right. Based on context, I think "systems" should have an apostrophe

Alright. Think that should be it. Just make sure these issues are fixed or addressed in a timely manner and I will pass this article.--12george1 (talk) 21:44, 22 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

- All of your comments have been sorted, thanks for the review 12george1.Jason Rees (talk) 22:19, 22 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  - Ok. I noticed three other instances where you said "systems" where it should have been "system's". I should have mentioned them in this review, but I decided to fix them for you. Everything else looks good, so I will now pass this article and list it as a GA.--12george1 (talk) 01:43, 23 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]