Talk:The Celebration Tour

GA Review

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Nominator: Chrishm21 (talk · contribs) 00:52, 8 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 11:09, 31 December 2024 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

   b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a. (reference section):

   b. (citations to reliable sources):

   c. (OR):

   d. (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a. (major aspects):

   b. (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

   b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

I will get on with this right away, have a Happy New Year! --K. Peake 11:09, 31 December 2024 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Infobox looks good!
• Simply describing as a bacterial infection would work better for the lead, to avoid using the quotation and it is implied as serious from the language of "developed" in this sentence
• "the singer had worked with" → "Madonna had worked with"
• "to friends lost to HIV-AIDS, and to artists" → "friends lost to HIV/AIDS, and artists" with the wikilink since repeat usage of "to" is not warranted when tribute is used at the start of the sentence
• Last para looks good!

 Done

Background

• "on Billboard's Dance Club Songs chart." → "on the US Billboard Dance Club Songs chart." to specify to readers since this is the first mention of a Billboard chart
• A full-stop is not needed after the quote with a question mark since that piece of grammar should end the sentence
• "circulating on October" → wouldn't it work better to write "circulating in October 2022" and change early October 2023 later on in this sentence to around a year later?
• The January 2023 part would be better to mention Billboard instead of The Sun to indicate to readers more clearly that this was from reliable sources and the word anniversary does not need speech marks around it
• Remove overly obvious wikilink on London – one of the most famous cities in the world
• "announced the Celebration tour" → "announced the Celebration Tour"
• Mention at the point of the tour dare it was in reference to the Truth or Dare film per the source

 Done

Development

• Quote box looks good!
• Maybe it would be worth writing her ideas after "she knows what she wants", as this is what the source indicates?
• "watch the show" → "then watch the show" since otherwise the prose implies this was a separate part of his role to checking for the alteration
• "or a statement"." → "or a statement."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences
• People reiterates on two occasions there was actually 3 physical therapists so please alter accordingly
• "each representing a decade." → "each representing a decade:" since the quote is explaining the reason behind this and the colon provides an introduction that does not yet exist in prose
• "wanted to tell it"." → "wanted to tell it.""

 Done

Hospitalization and postponement

• Img looks good!
• "On June 24, Madonna" → "On June 24, 2023, Madonna"
• The hospital being in New York and Madonna being unresponsive at her home specifically are not sourced
• You should not capitalise intensive care unit
• Add the several day-stay to prose per the source and how the lead mentions this
• "includes the tour"." → "includes the tour."" per MOS:QUOTE
• "In late July, Madonna" → "In late July 2023, Madonna"
• The part of the quote from "My focus now..." onwards is not source and re-invoke the ref here per direct quotations
• Definitely put more of the Pollstar article quoting into your own words per MOS:OVERQUOTE
• "On August 15," → "On August 15, 2023,"
• Copcabana Beach → Copacabana Beach with the wikilink, per the source and its official name
• "quite like this"." → "quite like this.""

 Done

Rehearsals

• "before the singer's time in" → "before Madonna's time in"
• "in mid August," → "in mid-August,"
• Pipe AO Arena to Manchester Arena
• "a few weeks later"." → "a few weeks later.""

 Done

Production

Staging

• Imgs look good!
• "she is in the room"." → "she is in the room."" per MOS:QUOTE
• Put more of the info about the elements being drawn from for the abstract map of New York into your own words to avoid too much copying of the source
• "that refers both the" → "that refers to both the"
• "the 1984 MTV Video Music Awards, and a clock." → "the 1984 MTV Video Music Awards and a clock's shape." per the source
• [24] should be after vast circular lighting rig instead since that is the only part of this sentence it backs up

 Done

Songs

• Imgs look good!
• Wikilink Rolling Stone UK per MOS:LINK2SECT
• "created their "dream" → "each created their "dream" to specify these were different ones
• "On February," → "In February 2023,"
• A full-stop is not needed after the quote with a question mark since that piece of grammar should end the sentence
• ""Bad Girl" and" → ""Bad Girl", and"
• ""Mother and Father" (2003) and" → ""Mother and Father" (2003), and"
• Pipe cover to Cover version

 Done

Fashion

• "On July, The New York Times" → "In July 2023, The New York Times"
• Imgs look good!
• "Madonna dons a" → "Madonna donned a" to be consistent with the past tense
• Sexual liberation should not be surrounded by quotation marks
• "A black mini dress with conical cups," → "a black mini dress with conical cups," but where are the conical cups sourced?
• Add a comma before the blue colour
• "based on the 2000s," → "based on the 2010s," per the source
• Remove the speech marks around "to the metaverse"

 Done

Philanthropy and tributes

• Pipe Tennessee Senate Bill 3 to Tennessee Adult Entertainment Act and re-invoke the ref here since it uses a direct quote
• Herb Ritts is not sourced as being one of these people

 Done

Concert synopsis

• Img looks good!
• "who's wearing a" → "who wears a"
• Remove repeat links on "Nothing Really Matters" "Holiday", "Live to Tell" and "Like A Prayer" in prose – already done in production
• Pipe trenchcoat to Trench coat
• Remove repeat link on Prince
• ""Erotica"'s performed with the singer and troupe" → ""Erotica"'s performed with Madonna and the troupe" with no wikilink here nor on boxing
• Remove repeat links on "Papa Don't Preach" and "Justify My Love"
• Remove overly obvious link on Dominican
• Remove repeat links on "Bad Girl" and "Vogue"
• "the troupe, including Madonna's daughter Estere," → "the troupe, including Estere," per her already having been introduced
• Remove repeat links on "Crazy For You" and "Don't Tell Me"
• Img looks good!
• You should not capitalise rainbow flag
• Remove repeat link on "Bedtime Story"
• "Madonna and Michael Jackson interact" → "Madonna and Jackson interact" per him already having been mentioned
• Why is the last para in the past tense while the rest is in present tense and this one does not seem to be about a single concert?

 Done

Critical reception

North America

• Quote box looks good!
• Put some of the BBC review into your own words to avoid overquoting
• "added that, "Madonna still doesn’t know how to quit, but boy, has" → "added that while "Madonna still doesn't know how to quit, boy has" per the source's wording
• "world has ever seen"." → "world has ever seen."" per MOS:QUOTE
• "a perfect 5-star rating," → "a perfect five-star rating," and invoke the ref at the end of this sentence as well as the second NME one per direct quoting
• Remove link on "Ray of Light"
• Wikilink The Guardian
• Re-word the second sentence to something like "The staff noted that Madonna's appearance and performances were her best in years."
• "the singer's mood: "While some" → "the singer's mood: "Where some" per the source if this part is kept; I would suggest putting some of this sentence into your own words to avoid overquoting
• Place the Ray of Light comparison into your own words and re-invoke the ref here
• "Mark Sutherland also criticized" → "Sutherland also criticized"
• "by Laura Snapes and Nick Reilly;" → "by Snapes and Reilly;"
• "Both Snapes and Thomas H. Green both agreed" → "Both Snapes and Green agreed"
• "of Michael Jackson's inclusion" → "of Jackson's inclusion"

 Done

North America

• ""La Isla Bonita", "Vogue" and" → ""La Isla Bonita", "Vogue", and"
• Either keep "for" at the start of the Caryn Ganz sentence or only use "writing for" next to The New York Times since using both is redundant; re-invoke the ref at the end of this first sentence too
• "as a "high-energy, jam-packed," → "as a highly energetic, busy" to put more of this into your own words
• Italicise Boston.com
• Img looks good!
• Re-invoke The Washington Post ref at the end of the first sentence
• "her music memorable"." → "her music memorable.""
• ""Bad Girl" and "Ray of Light"." → ""Bad Girl", and "Ray of Light"."
• Put some of the Telegram & Gazette review into your own words and re-invoke the ref at the end of the first sentence
• Mention the three and a half was out of a potential four stars
• ""Live to Tell" and "Erotica"" → ""Live to Tell", and "Erotica""
• Place the altered part of The Globe and Mail review into your own words
• "invention, not nostalgia"." → "invention, not nostalgia.""
• "frankly spectacular concert"." → "frankly spectacular concert.""
• ""Hung Up" and "Ray of Light"." → ""Hung Up", and "Ray of Light"." with the ref re-invoked at the end of this sentence
• "writing for Billboard: "[T]he sight and sound of a legend fully embracing her legacy." → "writing for Billboard that he watched and listened to Madonna's embracement of her legacy." Then start a new sentence beginning with Cinquemani continued:
• "to be omitted"." → "to be omitted.""

 Done

Brazil

• "held on May 4," → "held on May 4, 2024,"
• Remove wikilinks on Rio de Janeiro and Brazil
• "disposition", he also added: "It's hard to believe that the pop star was" → "disposition"; he also struggled to believe how she "was"
• "and sensuality" and about" → "and sensuality", and about"
• "of the Madonna phenomenon"." → "of the Madonna phenomenon.""
• Italicise Fantástico
• "courage and freedom"." → "courage and freedom.""
• ""disrespectful to religion" and "pornographic show"." → ""disrespectful to religion", and a "pornographic show"." although the religion quote is not sourced

 Done

Tardiness lawsuits

• "On January 19," → "On January 19, 2024,"
• "which the men claimed constituted a" → "which the men accused of constituting a" per WP:CLAIM
• "and that they "intend[ed]" → "and they "intend[ed]"
• "three months later," → "three months after the first one," to avoid potential confusion of it being three months after the case was dropped and re-invoke the ref at the end of this sentence

 Done

Commercial performance

Ticket sales

• Inglewood is not mentioned by the sources
• Remove wikilinks on overly obvious cities like Chicago
• "On January 20," → "On January 20, 2023,"
• "On January 23," → "On January 23, 2024,"
• "Berlin and Lisbon were" → "Berlin, and Lisbon were"
• The source mentions the sixth show as being in Los Angeles
• "were added in the United States;" → "were added in the US;" per MOS:US
• The D.C. show is not sourced as being the second one
• Remove wikilink on Mexico City

 Done

Boxscore

• "with an additional 7.5 million" → "with an additional $7.5 million"
• "was 2.9 million," → "was $2.9 million,"
• Remove wikilink on Beyoncé
• "Madonna was named UK's" → "Madonna was named the United Kingdom's"
• "becoming Madonna the first" → "making Madonna the first"
• Remove link on Variety
• "of $2,794,007 with 13,378 average tickets sold making" → "of $2,794,007, having sold an average of 13,378 tickets that made"

 Done

Tourism and economy

• For consistency, identify the location as Copacabana Beach on the img
• "Around January 19," → "Around January 19, 2023,"
• "the United States, Spain, India and Turkey," → "the US, Spain, India and Turkey," per MOS:US
• [125][25] should be placed in numerical order
• "discussions about Madonna impact" → "discussions about Madonna's impact"
• [129][126][130] should be placed in numerical order
• Remove duplicate link to Brazilian real at 10 and 51 million points
• Pipe Agência O Globo to Grupo Globo
• "before her show's announcement" → "before Madonna's show announcement"
• [143][144][134] should be placed in numerical order
• "On April 1," → "On April 1, 2024,"

 Done

Set list

• [81][82][84][85][151][152] is WP:OVERCITE; you should only need about four refs to sufficiently back this up
• Notes look good!

 Done

Tour dates

• [162][121] should be placed in numerical order
• Pipe Altice Arena to MEO Arena
• Pipe Mercedes-Benz Arena to Uber Arena
• Pipe Mediolanum Forum to Forum di Milano

 Done

Cancelled dates

• Good

 Done

Notes

• The hospitalization info is not sourced by the archive

See also

• Good

References

• Copyvio score looks much too high at 65.4%; cutting down on quoting from Pollstar will sort this
• Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine) on ref 1 instead of ref 5
• Wikilink Forbes on ref 3
• Cite BBC News for consistency on refs 18, 24 and 38
• Fix MOS:CAPS issues with refs 30 and 78
• Wikilink Rolling Stone UK on ref 34 per MOS:LINK2SECT
• Wikilink Women's Wear Daily on ref 52 instead of ref 53
• Remove or replace ref 54 per WP:FORBES on contributors
• Fix MOS:QWQ issues with refs 57, 72 and 100
• TheGuardian → The Guardian on ref 67
• Cite Boston.com as work/website instead on ref 76
• gshow → GShow as publisher and pipe to GloboNews on ref 89
• Fix MOS:CAPS issues and cite Correio da Manhã with the pipe to Correio da Manhã (Brazil) on ref 91
• Wikilink O Globo on ref 93 instead of ref 125
• Remove the author from ref 105
• Cite Veja on ref 94 and pipe to Veja (magazine) here instead of ref 130
• Wales Online → WalesOnline citing this as the publisher only with wikilink on ref 104
• Cite Official Charts Company as publisher instead on ref 109
• Add an access-date to ref 123
• Cite Abril as publisher instead on ref 129
• Wikilink Yahoo! on ref 145
• Remove The Current from ref 154
• Star Tribune → Minnesota Star Tribune with the wikilink on ref 159

External links

• Good

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed, once again I am very sorry for the terrible delay in completing from the reception onwards. My laptop crashed a second time after the first message and I've wrapped everything up now safely at last, this may took some time but I'm fine with that as it would be unfair to demand from you what I did not deliver in terms of speed haha! --K. Peake 18:41, 4 January 2025 (UTC)

   Done I'm on vacation –

  Bezarista Number One (talk) 21:30, 4 January 2025 (UTC)

Hi @Kyle Peake:! Let me know if everything has been addressed!--Christian (talk) 14:51, 6 January 2025 (UTC)

• ✓ Pass now, I did some copy editing although everything is sorted now! --K. Peake 20:26, 6 January 2025 (UTC)