Talk:Soma Bringer/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: JDC808 (talk · contribs) 17:17, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

First para:

Link "dungeon", "real-time combat" (not sure of the correct link for that), and "top-down perspective". "three-dimensional" and "Multiplayer" could also be linked.

Second para:

role-playing game can be linked.
Spell out "co-op" and link it (in parenthesis, you could put "co-op" and use that shorthand from thereafter).

Gameplay

Anything that I said to link above that isn't already linked here, link them here as well.

First para:

single player -> single-player (and make sure any other instance of "single player" includes the dash).
the players control -> the player controls

Second para:

"...are mapped to the DS face buttons." Spell out Nintendo DS, link it, and make it possessive.

Third para:

respawn - > respawns
Link buffs and debuffs

Synopsis

"At some point prior to the game's opening, mysterious monsters called Visitors being appearing..." I believe that is supposed to be "began appearing"?

Development

Since I said to link Nintendo DS above in Gameplay, unlink it here.

These are what I saw on the first read through. Also did some minor copy/editing. After you've addressed these, I'll have a second read through. --JDC808 ♫ 18:18, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@JDC808: I've addressed the issues you raised above. --ProtoDrake (talk) 18:31, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Verdict

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Nice article. --JDC808 ♫ 18:50, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]