Talk:Shanna Moakler/GA1

GA Review

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Hello. I will be doing the GA review for this article. Here are some suggestions for improvement:

The lead doesn't comply with WP:LEAD. It should be at 2 or 3 paragraphs summarizing the main points of the article. No new information should be in the lead (ex: vegetarianism). Also, since the article focuses so much on her relationships, more of that should also be in the lead.
Image:Shanna Moakler and Dick Clark at Miss Teen USA.jpg and Image:Screenshot of Shanna Moakler on Pacific Blue.jpg need fair use rationales, or they will be tagged for deletion.
~~Months and years should not be separated by the word "of". Ex: September of 2000~~
The jet crash has very little to do with Moakler herself. I'd delete most of it except maybe a brief description and the info about her almost being on the plane. I'd also put it in the Reconciliation section whether than a separate section.
The following sources need to be replaced by more reliable sources: TMZ, Celebrity Wonder, IMDB, Celebspin, Perez Hilton, Planet Gossip, Reality TV World...they can stay if you can prove their fact checking.
~~These refs are dead: 13~~
These refs need to be formatted: 46 and 47
~~When was she in the musical group? What became of it?~~

That's it for now. I'll let you work on these before adding anything new. I'll put the article on hold for seven days to allow for improvements. Nikki311 18:15, 25 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Okay. Per the note on my talk page, this nomination has been withdrawn. Nikki311 22:31, 6 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]