Talk:Respiratory syncytial virus
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[edit]Hello everyone, I will be focusing on this article as a WikiEducation project. I am planning to address the following:
REFERENCES: Several of sections (namely the signs and symptoms, evolution, taxonomy, and diagnosis) have minimal to no citations. Additionally, of the 27 articles currently included in the references, several of them appear to be primary scientific research [4, 6, 11, 13, 19, 20, 26], rather than secondary sources which are preferred for this platform. This introduces possible bias. Additionally, a few others are outdated [1, 18]. Most of the included citation links do link out effectively.
CONTENT: I would like to make the following changes / additions to the general structure of the article:
Signs and symptoms: Add subcategories for various presentations of the virus (pediatric, immunocompromised, etc.). Note: there is a lot of contradictory / inconsistent information in this section. It will need to be fact checked / streamlined. Flesh out the subsection on complications.
Cause: Add risk Factors subsection. Virology subsection: adjust the order (taxonomy > structure > genome > evolution). Consider adding life cycle. Note: all of these sections are overly technical and will need to be adjusted for readability. Remove Transmission subsection (wrong location).
Mechanism (add this heading): Move information about transmission here. Add subsection on pathophysiology.
Diagnosis: Add subsections for laboratory testing & imaging findings
Prevention: Add subsections on general prevention & palivizumab
Treatment: Add subsections on supportive treatments, antivirals, etc.
Outcomes (add this heading)
Epidemiology (add this heading): Subsections on children, immunocompromised, geriatrics
History: Rename the “Discovery” header as “History” (per the style guidelines)
Research: Move below the history header (per the style guidelines). Add subsections of RSV vaccine and RSV + covid. Paraphrase current section instead of having a direct excerpt from RSV Vaccine page.
EXPANSION REQUESTS: Several sections have been noted as requiring expansion, including “Virology Structure” (info on F and G proteins) and “Discovery” (info on the influence of bovine RSV research).
IMAGES: Move the classification image / box to the top of the page (plus add additional images of the virus). Bring the chest x-ray image down to diagnosis. Add additional images to the virology section (such as life cycle).
Does anyone have any questions, concerns, or ideas? I appreciate your help and feedback, and am excited to work with you all to improve this article!
Best, ACMetro (talk) 18:42, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
- @ACMetro: welcome! I don't know how active the article talk is, so whenever you need more eyes, please feel free to ask WikiProject Viruses.
- I added the expansion requests based on off-wiki comments from a friend who worked with RSV. She said if the article mentions RSV in cattle, it might as well discuss bovine RSV research and how it has affected HRSV research (or research techniques, I don't recall). F and G proteins specifically mean detailing their structure and function, as they are important research targets, especially for vaccine development, and even for clinical purposes and for understanding how RSV works. Of course, she also mentioned that the vaccine failure needs adequate coverage, as it's informing more recent discussions on COVID-19 vaccine development.
- Tread carefully with the primary sources. If you take a look at the archived discussions, at least one editor has mentioned promotion of one product over another. My friend mentioned that with regard to the old External links section, which is why that section doesn't exist anymore. Rotideypoc41352 (talk · contribs) 13:15, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
WikiMed Peer Review
[edit]Peer Review from last week
General Info
I am reviewing ACMetro’s work.
Link to draft: https://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/Respiratory_syncytial_virus
Lead Section: Good
- The first sentence states the article topic concisely and accurately.
- All the information included is also present in the body.
- Although it summarizes most major points, there are some important aspects of the diagnosis, prevention, and treatment that should also be included in this section.
Content/Organization: Excellent
- Very good work on the organization of the page. There are very clear and appropriate headings and subheadings that make it easier to read. I can tell you put a lot of work into this.
- The content you added enhances the quality of the article!
- I did not notice any grammatical/spelling errors.
- Readability is appropriate for the lay audience.
- Content is complete and your links are appropriate.
Tone and Balance: Excellent
- Tone in your writing is neutral and appropriately focuses on stating the information in an unbiased manner.
Sources and References: Excellent
- It is awesome to see that you added a large number of references that are mainly secondary and tertiary resources!
- Your references are also mainly all up to date. I noticed some older papers from the 1950s, but it seems those references are associated with statements made in the History section (which is appropriate).
- The few links that I checked worked effectively.
Images and Media: Excellent
- Under the Cause section I appreciate your use of images to describe the virology. It allows for better visualization of the structure and life cycle of the virus.
- Well done on the captions.
Overall Impressions: Excellent
Overall, your additions to this article are very apparent and definitely has improved the overall quality of this article. The organization, completeness, and readability really stand out to me. I appreciate your use of images and media to add context to the text. I am looking forward to seeing how you will add to the lead section to improve its completeness. Anicm1 (talk) 22:38, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
Airborne?
[edit]From what I can see, RSV is not generally considered an airborne virus but one transmitted via surfaces (e.g. PMID:11052396). Has thinking changed on this more recently than this 2000 source? Bon courage (talk) 10:16, 2 December 2022 (UTC)
- Also this CDC source, updated very recently, focuses on droplets and surfaces. Crossroads -talk- 18:31, 2 December 2022 (UTC)
Image
[edit]The image of RSV is uninformative. This one is much better: https://www.nih.gov/news-events/news-releases/experimental-respiratory-syncytial-virus-vaccine-prompts-antibody-surge Since it's government, it might be non-copyright. 71.213.63.77 (talk) 16:02, 15 July 2023 (UTC)
- That image is already in the article, so I just moved it up to the infobox instead. If anyone contests the edit, they can discuss it here. Rotideypoc41352 (talk · contribs) 17:30, 15 July 2023 (UTC)
Origin - ambiguity
[edit]"Environmental conditions such as temperature and pH can lead to decreased infectivity because RSV is sensitive to them." This statement appears to be ambiguous, and perhaps should be redrafted to emphasize "low temperature and low pH". PeterWD (talk) 05:30, 10 August 2024 (UTC)