Talk:PSA (song)/GA1

GA Review

Passed. dxneo (talk) 06:04, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: PSA (talk · contribs) 00:32, 20 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Dxneo (talk · contribs) 01:27, 7 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hello PSA, I'll be reviewing this article. Please consider reviewing "Truth or Dare". dxneo (talk) 01:27, 7 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Background

SZA's 2017 studio album, Ctrl, was met with widespread critical acclaim upon its release. Credited with bringing her mainstream fame, Ctrl has been described by many critics as making her a prominent figure in contemporary pop and R&B music and pushing the boundaries of the R&B genre.[note 1] Even so, she grew discontented with being classified as an R&B musician, and she felt like her music was being reductively categorized into the genre because she was a Black woman.[8] — how is this relevant to the subject? dxneo (talk) 01:27, 7 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Well, the article later states that SZA wanted to show that she was a versatile artist who can make music beyond R&B, so it feels natural to open the article by saying why this vision of her as just an R&B artist is so steeped within popular culture (e.g. by saying Ctrl was an R&B classic)

After the album's release, media began speculating on when her next one, SOS, would arrive. — after which album? dxneo (talk) 01:27, 7 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Up until the phrase "after the album's release" only Ctrl has been mentioned, so there is no need to rewrite for clarity

I also don't understand the relation of the second paragraph to this article, but I'll spare it as it is some kind of a build up. dxneo (talk) 01:27, 7 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Music and lyrics

Release

which would consist of at least seven songs that were either new music or SOS outtakes. — reads like it was written by a "fan". Can you tweak it a bit? dxneo (talk) 01:27, 7 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry, but how does this read like it was written by a fan (also, why the quotation marks)? I mean, sure, a SZA fan editing Wikipedia articles about her is expected, but the neutrality seems to be the thing you're observing here, and I do not see how it's non-neutral.

SOS debuted atop the US Billboard 200 chart, SZA's first to do so, keeping Taylor Swift's Midnights (2022) off the top and spending ten weeks at number one.[34][35] The tracking week ending January 6, 2023, marked SOS's fourth week at number one, and there was a possibility that Midnights might overtake the album for the fifth week.[36] — why is the album composition squeezed in here? I get that it's a build up, but this is diving way too into the Swift & SZA albums. Can it be trimmed a bit? dxneo (talk) 01:27, 7 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I did my best

Live performances

When she headlined Glastonbury in June 30, 2024,} ===> When she headlined Glastonbury on June 30,2024. dxneo (talk) 01:27, 7 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Good catch!

Original search

I don't see any credit or personnel. Any reason for that? dxneo (talk) 01:30, 7 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

In the infobox, I see you've listed producers and songwriters. Where did you obtain that information as I did not find it referenced anywhere in the body of the article. dxneo (talk) 01:30, 7 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Let me address both: as of today, people can get "PSA" only by either watching the trailer on YouTube or buying a download from TDE's website. The credits aren't there on YouTube, meaning the only way to get them is by looking at the metadata from the audio file downloaded from TDE. The problem is that the metadata can accomodate only the performers, songwriters, and producers, meaning a "credits" section would be very short and redundant. Plus, there isn't exactly a citation template for audio metadata, so I justified this to myself by saying that since the source is assumed to be the subject itself, a citation was not necessary. Elias / PSA 🏕️🪐 ^{[please make some noise]} 04:58, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sources

Copyright vio

Overall

Nice and short, maybe too short considering that it needs to be trimmed to stay focused on the subject. Otherwise, I enjoyed it. dxneo (talk) 01:27, 7 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hello @Dxneo, and thank you for this review! I apologize that this took me beyond the seven-day window. Allow me to address the comments within 24 hours. Elias / PSA 🏕️🪐 ^{[please make some noise]} 04:04, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

All of your comments have received responses. If there are any more concerns, please say so. Elias / PSA 🏕️🪐 ^{[please make some noise]} 04:58, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you, I'm ready to pass this. Ugh, I'll just leave icons like that, too lazy to tweak them. dxneo (talk) 06:03, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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