Talk:Open Arms (SZA song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ippantekina (talk · contribs) 07:49, 24 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section):

b. (citations to reliable sources):

c. (OR):

d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects):

b. (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

"for its vocals and eclectic musical style" nitpick-y but "SZA's vocals and its eclectic musical style"?
- Tweaked. I prefer "the eclectic".
"The roster ranged from Billie Eilish, Harry Styles, and Olivia Rodrigo; to Doja Cat, Drake, and Kendrick Lamar" interesting, but what makes you grouop Eilish/Styles/Rodrigo into one group and Doja/Drake/Kendrick into another?
- Billie/Harry/Olivia are more of singers, and Doja/Drake/Kendrick are more of rappers. Listing them in an "A, B, C, D, E, and F" format feels flat and uninteresting, and "from A, B, C; to D, E, F" adds more flair.

"backed by finger-picked acoustic guitar" ditto "a finger-picked acoustic guitar"
- Done
I am uncertain if we need to capitalize "Black" as in "Black woman"
- MOS:RACECAPS permits either capitalization
"a departure from his usual sound" some more context on Scott's "usual sound" is helpful here
- Also done

"appears as the twentieth track" shouldn't it be "20th" for consistency?
I'd move "Note 3" one sentence prior and only include the Observer ref for Empire's comment
- +1 for both
Any particular reason why the names of the critics for Variety (Amorosi) and the LA Times (Wood) are omitted?
- Not really, I just thought they'd clutter the prose initially, but on second thought there's no harm naming them. Done

Overall a very solid article. My comments above are by no means detrimental to quality. Putting this On hold until all my comments are addressed. Ippantekina (talk) 16:36, 25 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]
- @Ippantekina: haven't seen you in a while! Hope Wiki-life and off-wiki life have been kind to you since we last met . Much gratitude for the brief review and the verdict; I've addressed everything that needs addressing. Looking forward to your responses. Best, ‍ ‍ Elias 🌊 ‍ ‍ ^{💬 "Will you call me?"}
  _{📝 "Will you hang me out to dry?"} 05:13, 26 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  Thanks for your kind words :) Sometimes I feel like Wiki sucks me in a little bit too strong but other than that I'm still balancing everything so far lol. Very good work on the article and thanks for addressing my comments--I need to learn a thing or two from you! Passing it now. Ippantekina (talk) 11:42, 27 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]