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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:16, 20 June 2022 (UTC)
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I will review this article today --K. Peake 07:16, 20 June 2022 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Invoked a note next to "I Don't Know Why" saying it was the B-side in the rest of Europe, as the worldwide release is not backed up
- Pipe Skärmarbrink to Skärmarbrink metro station in the infobox
- The pop genre is not sourced in the body and only Schlager influences are mentioned
- Mention in the first sentence that it was "for his seventh studio album of the same name (1976)"
- The second sentence of the first para should be the backing vocals one instead
- The lead is quite poorly ordered; for starters, the rejection sentence should be the fourth sentence of the first para, then the recording one and release afterwards
- ""Moviestar" tells the story of an individual who believes to be an A-list actor" → "It tells the story of an individual who dreams of being an actor"
- "It makes multiple references to" → "Multiple references are made to" but the pop culture part is not directly sourced anywhere in the body
- "producer Bengt Palmers rejected it as he felt he could not properly produce the record." → "Bengt Palmers rejected it as he felt he could not properly undertake production."
- Sveriges Television should not be italicised
- Remove the previous connections part since this is only notable for the body, not the lead
- Remove overly obvious wikilink on United Kingdom
- Critical reception should come before commercial performance
- "became a hit on" → "became a hit in"
- Remove wikilink on Continental Europe
- Remove wikilink on Netherlands
- "during August of that year. It made it's way across" → "during August 1975. The song moved across"
- Remove wikilink on Scandinavia
- "The single was well-received" → ""Moviestar" was well-received"
- Wikilink signature song
Background
[edit]- Remove wikilink on Stockholm, also the theatre is not sourced as being there
- "There he met several people" → "There Harpo met several people"
- The songs catching the attention of those friends is not sourced
- "which would eventually attract the attention of" → "eventually attracting the attention of"
- Pipe Stig "Stikkan" Andersson to Sting Anderson
- Pipe pop to Pop music
- Fix MOS:QWQ issues on the quote box
- "Instead, he signed with" → "Instead, Harpo signed with"
- Introduce Bengt Palmers as being a producer
- "his single "Sayonara" managed" → "Harpo's single "Sayonara" managed"
- "he saw virtually no" → "Harpo initially saw virtually no"
- The story being amusing for Harpo is not sourced
- "his record label to record the song." → "his record label to record it." but this is not sourced, unless my translator is faulty?
- Sveriges Radio should not be italicised
- "which Harpo would state" → "which Harpo would explain"
Composition and recording
[edit]- Img looks good!
- Swap the lyrical and musical paras around
- "the song follows an" → "the song follows the story of an" but none of this sentence is sourced by the ref invoked
- Pipe third-person perspective to Gender neutrality in languages with gendered third-person pronouns
- "reveals that this actor has" → "reveal the actor has"
- Pipe television commercials to Television advertisement
- Sveriges Radio should not be italicised
- "this brought some dept" → "this brought some depth" but this quote is unsourced
- "Musically, the song is rather upbeat with" → "Musically, "Moviestar" has an upbeat style with" but can't you sourced any genres?
- "that come in after each" → "that come in after the"
- Pipe choruses to Refrain
- "The song features a" → "It features a"
- "written by producer Bengt Palmers," → "written by Palmers,"
- "to his producer Bengt Palmers, it was" → "to Palmers, it was"
- "Since Harpo already hade" → "Since Harpo already had"
- Remove wikilink on Stockholm
- Remove wikilink on ABBA
- Remove wikilink on Polar Music
- "backing voice came Lena Ericsson who" → "backing voice came from Lena Ericsson, who"
Release and commercial performance
[edit]- "as English division of" → "as the English division of"
- "through a smaller record label, DJM Records on" → "through smaller record label DJM Records on"
- "It was released across Europe" → either change to the rest of Europe or Continental Europe, depending on where it was released
- Pipe radio stations to Radio broadcasting
- "by his own." → "on his own."
- "In Sweden, France and UK" → "In Sweden, France and the United Kingdom" but where is the UK release sourced?
- "his debut album Leo The Leopard the previous year." → "Harpo's debut album Leo The Leopard (1975)."
- Pipe gold disc to Music recording certification on the img text
- "the Netherlands on the Dutch Top 40; it entered" → "the Netherlands in the Dutch Top 40, entering"
- "it would enter" → "the song would enter"
- ""Moviestar" had significant appeal in" → ""Moviestar" experienced significant success in"
- Remove wikilink on German speaking world
- Remove wikilink on Germany
- Remove wikilink on Austria
- Remove wikilink on Switzerland
- "weeks while it was at number-one for four weeks" → "weeks, while spending four weeks at number-one"
- Shouldn't number-one have a dash always for consistency?
- "a hit in Oceania, reaching the top-ten" → "a hit in Oceania, reaching the top-10" per MOS:NUM
- Remove wikilink on Australia
- Remove wikilink on New Zealand
- [17] should only be invoked once in the sentence
- Remove wikilink on Scandinavia
- "while also reaching" → "while also peaking at" but this position is not sourced, also why is an additional citation used for position 3 in Denmark here?
- Remove wikilink on Finland
- Italicise Svensktoppen
- Add a full-stop at the end of the above sentence rather than a semi-colon
- "was blocked by DJM who" → "was blocked by DJM, who"
- ""Movie Star" becoming a chart hit in the UK; it reached" → ""Movie Star" becoming a chart hit in the UK, reaching" to start the sentence, unless a source can be added to back up them relenting
- The capitalization through the release is not sourced
- "reached number two," → "reached number two on two respective weeks," or something similar, but the positions are not sourced by the URLs; maybe add archives?
- Wikilink compilation albums
Critical Reception and legacy
[edit]- Retitle to Critical reception and legacy
- No year from the 21st century, yet alone 2012 is mentioned here so remove the img per lack of relevance
- "by Expressen, who write that" → "by the staff of Expressen, who write"
- "production" by Bengt Palmers." → "production" by Palmers."
- "by the backing comp" → "by the backing composition"
- If there is a bass guitarist, should his instrument be mentioned in comp or is the role not really detailed enough?
- wrote that "Moviestar certainly" → "write that "Moviestar certainly" and introduce this as being by staff too
- "but compares the song" → "and compare the song"
- "the single is described as" → "the staff describe the single as"
- "They end the review" → "The staff end the review"
- "with Sveriges Radio, he stated" → "with Sveriges Radio, he stated:"
- "for Sveriges Television however, he stated" → "for Sveriges Television however, Harpo said"
- Pipe royalties to Royalty payment
- Around the start of the third para, you should mention the one million figure noted in the lead
- Pipe "Shenandoah" to Oh Shenandoah and add the release year
- "It is therefore cited" → "The song has therefore been cited"
- "amongst Germans which has led Harpo to" → "amongst Germans, leading Harpo to"
Personnel
[edit]- Retitle to Credits and personnel
- Use
{{spaced ndash}}
so there is the right space between credits and personnel
Charts
[edit]Weekly charts
[edit]- Pipe Suomen virallinen lista to The Official Finnish Charts
- SNEP should not be italicised
- (VG-Lista) → (VG-lista) with the wikilink
- Shouldn't the Swedish charts be in alphabetical order?
- Place Media Control in brackets instead and pipe to GfK Entertainment charts
Year-end charts
[edit]- The charts needn't be linked here when you have already done that in weekly
References
[edit]- Copyvio score looks amazing at 2.0%!!!!
- Cite Sveriges Radio as publisher instead on ref 1
- www.allas.se → Allas.se on ref 2
- What exactly makes ref 4 a reliable source?
- Remove SVT Play from ref 6
- Cite VG-lista 2022 as publisher instead on ref 9 and pipe to VG-lista
- Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 10 and change www.ndr.de → Ndr.de, citing as publisher instead
- Remove or replace ref 12 since citing lyrics themselves is definitely not reliable
- Remove the author from ref 13 and change sverigesradio.se → Sveriges Radio, citing as publisher instead
- For ref 13, cite the title and publisher first, followed by YouTube in the via parameter then the archive URLs
- Cite Billboard Books as work/website instead on ref 17 with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
- WP:OVERLINK of Albert Bonniers Förlag on ref 18
- Ref 19 is a duplicate of ref 6
- Remove wikilink on EMI for refs 23, 40, 41, 44 and 54; also remove any Harpo wikilinks
- Remove hitparade.ch from ref 25
- Cite GfK Entertainment charts instead on ref 27, with the wikilink and as publisher
- Cite last name followed by first on ref 30 instead for consistency
- Remove www.flavourofnz.co.nz from ref 31 and cite RIANZ as publisher instead, piping to Recorded Music NZ
- WP:OVERLINK of Sveriges Radio on refs 37 and 70
- Remove musikon.se from ref 39
- Cite Sverigetopplistan as publisher instead on refs 42 and 43, which should cite archives or the correct URLs
- Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 49 and cite Hallandsposten instead with the wikilink
- Music and Media → Music & Media on ref 51 with the wikilink
- Remove Norwegiancharts.com from ref 52 and change to VG-lista with no wikilink
- WP:OVERLINK of Sverigetopplistan and remove Swedishcharts.com on ref 53
- Refs 55 and 75 are duplicates of ref 30
- WP:OVERLINK of Ö3 Austria Top 40 on ref 56
- Ref 66 is a duplicate of ref 31
- Ref 69 is a duplicate of ref 35
- Ref 71 is a duplicate of ref 29
- WP:OVERLINK of Dutch Top 40 on ref 73
- WP:OVERLINK of Single Top 100 on ref 74 and remove Dutch Charts
- Ref 77 is a duplicate of ref 37
Final comments and verdict
[edit]On hold until all of the issues are fixed; the thing I noticed most to be honest was a messy ref layout. --K. Peake 14:52, 20 June 2022 (UTC)
- ✗ Fail time, as it has been a month now and no response whatsoever even after I posted on the user's talk page. --K. Peake 09:27, 21 July 2022 (UTC)