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GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:16, 20 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will review this article today --K. Peake 07:16, 20 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Invoked a note next to "I Don't Know Why" saying it was the B-side in the rest of Europe, as the worldwide release is not backed up
  • Pipe Skärmarbrink to Skärmarbrink metro station in the infobox
  • The pop genre is not sourced in the body and only Schlager influences are mentioned
  • Mention in the first sentence that it was "for his seventh studio album of the same name (1976)"
  • The second sentence of the first para should be the backing vocals one instead
  • The lead is quite poorly ordered; for starters, the rejection sentence should be the fourth sentence of the first para, then the recording one and release afterwards
  • ""Moviestar" tells the story of an individual who believes to be an A-list actor" → "It tells the story of an individual who dreams of being an actor"
  • "It makes multiple references to" → "Multiple references are made to" but the pop culture part is not directly sourced anywhere in the body
  • "producer Bengt Palmers rejected it as he felt he could not properly produce the record." → "Bengt Palmers rejected it as he felt he could not properly undertake production."
  • Sveriges Television should not be italicised
  • Remove the previous connections part since this is only notable for the body, not the lead
  • Remove overly obvious wikilink on United Kingdom
  • Critical reception should come before commercial performance
  • "became a hit on" → "became a hit in"
  • Remove wikilink on Continental Europe
  • Remove wikilink on Netherlands
  • "during August of that year. It made it's way across" → "during August 1975. The song moved across"
  • Remove wikilink on Scandinavia
  • "The single was well-received" → ""Moviestar" was well-received"
  • Wikilink signature song

Background

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  • Remove wikilink on Stockholm, also the theatre is not sourced as being there
  • "There he met several people" → "There Harpo met several people"
  • The songs catching the attention of those friends is not sourced
  • "which would eventually attract the attention of" → "eventually attracting the attention of"
  • Pipe Stig "Stikkan" Andersson to Sting Anderson
  • Pipe pop to Pop music
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues on the quote box
  • "Instead, he signed with" → "Instead, Harpo signed with"
  • Introduce Bengt Palmers as being a producer
  • "his single "Sayonara" managed" → "Harpo's single "Sayonara" managed"
  • "he saw virtually no" → "Harpo initially saw virtually no"
  • The story being amusing for Harpo is not sourced
  • "his record label to record the song." → "his record label to record it." but this is not sourced, unless my translator is faulty?
  • Sveriges Radio should not be italicised
  • "which Harpo would state" → "which Harpo would explain"

Composition and recording

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  • Img looks good!
  • Swap the lyrical and musical paras around
  • "the song follows an" → "the song follows the story of an" but none of this sentence is sourced by the ref invoked
  • Pipe third-person perspective to Gender neutrality in languages with gendered third-person pronouns
  • "reveals that this actor has" → "reveal the actor has"
  • Pipe television commercials to Television advertisement
  • Sveriges Radio should not be italicised
  • "this brought some dept" → "this brought some depth" but this quote is unsourced
  • "Musically, the song is rather upbeat with" → "Musically, "Moviestar" has an upbeat style with" but can't you sourced any genres?
  • "that come in after each" → "that come in after the"
  • Pipe choruses to Refrain
  • "The song features a" → "It features a"
  • "written by producer Bengt Palmers," → "written by Palmers,"
  • "to his producer Bengt Palmers, it was" → "to Palmers, it was"
  • "Since Harpo already hade" → "Since Harpo already had"
  • Remove wikilink on Stockholm
  • Remove wikilink on ABBA
  • Remove wikilink on Polar Music
  • "backing voice came Lena Ericsson who" → "backing voice came from Lena Ericsson, who"

Release and commercial performance

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  • "as English division of" → "as the English division of"
  • "through a smaller record label, DJM Records on" → "through smaller record label DJM Records on"
  • "It was released across Europe" → either change to the rest of Europe or Continental Europe, depending on where it was released
  • Pipe radio stations to Radio broadcasting
  • "by his own." → "on his own."
  • "In Sweden, France and UK" → "In Sweden, France and the United Kingdom" but where is the UK release sourced?
  • "his debut album Leo The Leopard the previous year." → "Harpo's debut album Leo The Leopard (1975)."
  • Pipe gold disc to Music recording certification on the img text
  • "the Netherlands on the Dutch Top 40; it entered" → "the Netherlands in the Dutch Top 40, entering"
  • "it would enter" → "the song would enter"
  • ""Moviestar" had significant appeal in" → ""Moviestar" experienced significant success in"
  • Remove wikilink on German speaking world
  • Remove wikilink on Germany
  • Remove wikilink on Austria
  • Remove wikilink on Switzerland
  • "weeks while it was at number-one for four weeks" → "weeks, while spending four weeks at number-one"
  • Shouldn't number-one have a dash always for consistency?
  • "a hit in Oceania, reaching the top-ten" → "a hit in Oceania, reaching the top-10" per MOS:NUM
  • Remove wikilink on Australia
  • Remove wikilink on New Zealand
  • [17] should only be invoked once in the sentence
  • Remove wikilink on Scandinavia
  • "while also reaching" → "while also peaking at" but this position is not sourced, also why is an additional citation used for position 3 in Denmark here?
  • Remove wikilink on Finland
  • Italicise Svensktoppen
  • Add a full-stop at the end of the above sentence rather than a semi-colon
  • "was blocked by DJM who" → "was blocked by DJM, who"
  • ""Movie Star" becoming a chart hit in the UK; it reached" → ""Movie Star" becoming a chart hit in the UK, reaching" to start the sentence, unless a source can be added to back up them relenting
  • The capitalization through the release is not sourced
  • "reached number two," → "reached number two on two respective weeks," or something similar, but the positions are not sourced by the URLs; maybe add archives?
  • Wikilink compilation albums

Critical Reception and legacy

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  • Retitle to Critical reception and legacy
  • No year from the 21st century, yet alone 2012 is mentioned here so remove the img per lack of relevance
  • "by Expressen, who write that" → "by the staff of Expressen, who write"
  • "production" by Bengt Palmers." → "production" by Palmers."
  • "by the backing comp" → "by the backing composition"
  • If there is a bass guitarist, should his instrument be mentioned in comp or is the role not really detailed enough?
  • wrote that "Moviestar certainly" → "write that "Moviestar certainly" and introduce this as being by staff too
  • "but compares the song" → "and compare the song"
  • "the single is described as" → "the staff describe the single as"
  • "They end the review" → "The staff end the review"
  • "with Sveriges Radio, he stated" → "with Sveriges Radio, he stated:"
  • "for Sveriges Television however, he stated" → "for Sveriges Television however, Harpo said"
  • Pipe royalties to Royalty payment
  • Around the start of the third para, you should mention the one million figure noted in the lead
  • Pipe "Shenandoah" to Oh Shenandoah and add the release year
  • "It is therefore cited" → "The song has therefore been cited"
  • "amongst Germans which has led Harpo to" → "amongst Germans, leading Harpo to"

Personnel

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  • Retitle to Credits and personnel
  • Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel

Charts

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Weekly charts

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Year-end charts

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  • The charts needn't be linked here when you have already done that in weekly

References

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  • Copyvio score looks amazing at 2.0%!!!!
  • Cite Sveriges Radio as publisher instead on ref 1
  • www.allas.seAllas.se on ref 2
  • What exactly makes ref 4 a reliable source?
  • Remove SVT Play from ref 6
  • Cite VG-lista 2022 as publisher instead on ref 9 and pipe to VG-lista
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 10 and change www.ndr.de → Ndr.de, citing as publisher instead
  • Remove or replace ref 12 since citing lyrics themselves is definitely not reliable
  • Remove the author from ref 13 and change sverigesradio.se → Sveriges Radio, citing as publisher instead
  • For ref 13, cite the title and publisher first, followed by YouTube in the via parameter then the archive URLs
  • Cite Billboard Books as work/website instead on ref 17 with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • WP:OVERLINK of Albert Bonniers Förlag on ref 18
  • Ref 19 is a duplicate of ref 6
  • Remove wikilink on EMI for refs 23, 40, 41, 44 and 54; also remove any Harpo wikilinks
  • Remove hitparade.ch from ref 25
  • Cite GfK Entertainment charts instead on ref 27, with the wikilink and as publisher
  • Cite last name followed by first on ref 30 instead for consistency
  • Remove www.flavourofnz.co.nz from ref 31 and cite RIANZ as publisher instead, piping to Recorded Music NZ
  • WP:OVERLINK of Sveriges Radio on refs 37 and 70
  • Remove musikon.se from ref 39
  • Cite Sverigetopplistan as publisher instead on refs 42 and 43, which should cite archives or the correct URLs
  • Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 49 and cite Hallandsposten instead with the wikilink
  • Music and Media → Music & Media on ref 51 with the wikilink
  • Remove Norwegiancharts.com from ref 52 and change to VG-lista with no wikilink
  • WP:OVERLINK of Sverigetopplistan and remove Swedishcharts.com on ref 53
  • Refs 55 and 75 are duplicates of ref 30
  • WP:OVERLINK of Ö3 Austria Top 40 on ref 56
  • Ref 66 is a duplicate of ref 31
  • Ref 69 is a duplicate of ref 35
  • Ref 71 is a duplicate of ref 29
  • WP:OVERLINK of Dutch Top 40 on ref 73
  • WP:OVERLINK of Single Top 100 on ref 74 and remove Dutch Charts
  • Ref 77 is a duplicate of ref 37

Final comments and verdict

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