Talk:Moviestar (Harpo song)

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:16, 20 June 2022 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will review this article today --K. Peake 07:16, 20 June 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Invoked a note next to "I Don't Know Why" saying it was the B-side in the rest of Europe, as the worldwide release is not backed up
• Pipe Skärmarbrink to Skärmarbrink metro station in the infobox
• The pop genre is not sourced in the body and only Schlager influences are mentioned
• Mention in the first sentence that it was "for his seventh studio album of the same name (1976)"
• The second sentence of the first para should be the backing vocals one instead
• The lead is quite poorly ordered; for starters, the rejection sentence should be the fourth sentence of the first para, then the recording one and release afterwards
• ""Moviestar" tells the story of an individual who believes to be an A-list actor" → "It tells the story of an individual who dreams of being an actor"
• "It makes multiple references to" → "Multiple references are made to" but the pop culture part is not directly sourced anywhere in the body
• "producer Bengt Palmers rejected it as he felt he could not properly produce the record." → "Bengt Palmers rejected it as he felt he could not properly undertake production."
• Sveriges Television should not be italicised
• Remove the previous connections part since this is only notable for the body, not the lead
• Remove overly obvious wikilink on United Kingdom
• Critical reception should come before commercial performance
• "became a hit on" → "became a hit in"
• Remove wikilink on Continental Europe
• Remove wikilink on Netherlands
• "during August of that year. It made it's way across" → "during August 1975. The song moved across"
• Remove wikilink on Scandinavia
• "The single was well-received" → ""Moviestar" was well-received"
• Wikilink signature song

Background

• Remove wikilink on Stockholm, also the theatre is not sourced as being there
• "There he met several people" → "There Harpo met several people"
• The songs catching the attention of those friends is not sourced
• "which would eventually attract the attention of" → "eventually attracting the attention of"
• Pipe Stig "Stikkan" Andersson to Sting Anderson
• Pipe pop to Pop music
• Fix MOS:QWQ issues on the quote box
• "Instead, he signed with" → "Instead, Harpo signed with"
• Introduce Bengt Palmers as being a producer
• "his single "Sayonara" managed" → "Harpo's single "Sayonara" managed"
• "he saw virtually no" → "Harpo initially saw virtually no"
• The story being amusing for Harpo is not sourced
• "his record label to record the song." → "his record label to record it." but this is not sourced, unless my translator is faulty?
• Sveriges Radio should not be italicised
• "which Harpo would state" → "which Harpo would explain"

Composition and recording

• Img looks good!
• Swap the lyrical and musical paras around
• "the song follows an" → "the song follows the story of an" but none of this sentence is sourced by the ref invoked
• Pipe third-person perspective to Gender neutrality in languages with gendered third-person pronouns
• "reveals that this actor has" → "reveal the actor has"
• Pipe television commercials to Television advertisement
• Sveriges Radio should not be italicised
• "this brought some dept" → "this brought some depth" but this quote is unsourced
• "Musically, the song is rather upbeat with" → "Musically, "Moviestar" has an upbeat style with" but can't you sourced any genres?
• "that come in after each" → "that come in after the"
• Pipe choruses to Refrain
• "The song features a" → "It features a"
• "written by producer Bengt Palmers," → "written by Palmers,"
• "to his producer Bengt Palmers, it was" → "to Palmers, it was"
• "Since Harpo already hade" → "Since Harpo already had"
• Remove wikilink on Stockholm
• Remove wikilink on ABBA
• Remove wikilink on Polar Music
• "backing voice came Lena Ericsson who" → "backing voice came from Lena Ericsson, who"

Release and commercial performance

• "as English division of" → "as the English division of"
• "through a smaller record label, DJM Records on" → "through smaller record label DJM Records on"
• "It was released across Europe" → either change to the rest of Europe or Continental Europe, depending on where it was released
• Pipe radio stations to Radio broadcasting
• "by his own." → "on his own."
• "In Sweden, France and UK" → "In Sweden, France and the United Kingdom" but where is the UK release sourced?
• "his debut album Leo The Leopard the previous year." → "Harpo's debut album Leo The Leopard (1975)."
• Pipe gold disc to Music recording certification on the img text
• "the Netherlands on the Dutch Top 40; it entered" → "the Netherlands in the Dutch Top 40, entering"
• "it would enter" → "the song would enter"
• ""Moviestar" had significant appeal in" → ""Moviestar" experienced significant success in"
• Remove wikilink on German speaking world
• Remove wikilink on Germany
• Remove wikilink on Austria
• Remove wikilink on Switzerland
• "weeks while it was at number-one for four weeks" → "weeks, while spending four weeks at number-one"
• Shouldn't number-one have a dash always for consistency?
• "a hit in Oceania, reaching the top-ten" → "a hit in Oceania, reaching the top-10" per MOS:NUM
• Remove wikilink on Australia
• Remove wikilink on New Zealand
• [17] should only be invoked once in the sentence
• Remove wikilink on Scandinavia
• "while also reaching" → "while also peaking at" but this position is not sourced, also why is an additional citation used for position 3 in Denmark here?
• Remove wikilink on Finland
• Italicise Svensktoppen
• Add a full-stop at the end of the above sentence rather than a semi-colon
• "was blocked by DJM who" → "was blocked by DJM, who"
• ""Movie Star" becoming a chart hit in the UK; it reached" → ""Movie Star" becoming a chart hit in the UK, reaching" to start the sentence, unless a source can be added to back up them relenting
• The capitalization through the release is not sourced
• "reached number two," → "reached number two on two respective weeks," or something similar, but the positions are not sourced by the URLs; maybe add archives?
• Wikilink compilation albums

Critical Reception and legacy

• Retitle to Critical reception and legacy
• No year from the 21st century, yet alone 2012 is mentioned here so remove the img per lack of relevance
• "by Expressen, who write that" → "by the staff of Expressen, who write"
• "production" by Bengt Palmers." → "production" by Palmers."
• "by the backing comp" → "by the backing composition"
• If there is a bass guitarist, should his instrument be mentioned in comp or is the role not really detailed enough?
• wrote that "Moviestar certainly" → "write that "Moviestar certainly" and introduce this as being by staff too
• "but compares the song" → "and compare the song"
• "the single is described as" → "the staff describe the single as"
• "They end the review" → "The staff end the review"
• "with Sveriges Radio, he stated" → "with Sveriges Radio, he stated:"
• "for Sveriges Television however, he stated" → "for Sveriges Television however, Harpo said"
• Pipe royalties to Royalty payment
• Around the start of the third para, you should mention the one million figure noted in the lead
• Pipe "Shenandoah" to Oh Shenandoah and add the release year
• "It is therefore cited" → "The song has therefore been cited"
• "amongst Germans which has led Harpo to" → "amongst Germans, leading Harpo to"

Personnel

• Retitle to Credits and personnel
• Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel

Charts

Weekly charts

• Pipe Suomen virallinen lista to The Official Finnish Charts
• SNEP should not be italicised
• (VG-Lista) → (VG-lista) with the wikilink
• Shouldn't the Swedish charts be in alphabetical order?
• Place Media Control in brackets instead and pipe to GfK Entertainment charts

Year-end charts

• The charts needn't be linked here when you have already done that in weekly

References

• Copyvio score looks amazing at 2.0%!!!!
• Cite Sveriges Radio as publisher instead on ref 1
• www.allas.se → Allas.se on ref 2
• What exactly makes ref 4 a reliable source?
• Remove SVT Play from ref 6
• Cite VG-lista 2022 as publisher instead on ref 9 and pipe to VG-lista
• Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 10 and change www.ndr.de → Ndr.de, citing as publisher instead
• Remove or replace ref 12 since citing lyrics themselves is definitely not reliable
• Remove the author from ref 13 and change sverigesradio.se → Sveriges Radio, citing as publisher instead
• For ref 13, cite the title and publisher first, followed by YouTube in the via parameter then the archive URLs
• Cite Billboard Books as work/website instead on ref 17 with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
• WP:OVERLINK of Albert Bonniers Förlag on ref 18
• Ref 19 is a duplicate of ref 6
• Remove wikilink on EMI for refs 23, 40, 41, 44 and 54; also remove any Harpo wikilinks
• Remove hitparade.ch from ref 25
• Cite GfK Entertainment charts instead on ref 27, with the wikilink and as publisher
• Cite last name followed by first on ref 30 instead for consistency
• Remove www.flavourofnz.co.nz from ref 31 and cite RIANZ as publisher instead, piping to Recorded Music NZ
• WP:OVERLINK of Sveriges Radio on refs 37 and 70
• Remove musikon.se from ref 39
• Cite Sverigetopplistan as publisher instead on refs 42 and 43, which should cite archives or the correct URLs
• Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 49 and cite Hallandsposten instead with the wikilink
• Music and Media → Music & Media on ref 51 with the wikilink
• Remove Norwegiancharts.com from ref 52 and change to VG-lista with no wikilink
• WP:OVERLINK of Sverigetopplistan and remove Swedishcharts.com on ref 53
• Refs 55 and 75 are duplicates of ref 30
• WP:OVERLINK of Ö3 Austria Top 40 on ref 56
• Ref 66 is a duplicate of ref 31
• Ref 69 is a duplicate of ref 35
• Ref 71 is a duplicate of ref 29
• WP:OVERLINK of Dutch Top 40 on ref 73
• WP:OVERLINK of Single Top 100 on ref 74 and remove Dutch Charts
• Ref 77 is a duplicate of ref 37

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; the thing I noticed most to be honest was a messy ref layout. --K. Peake 14:52, 20 June 2022 (UTC)

• ✗ Fail time, as it has been a month now and no response whatsoever even after I posted on the user's talk page. --K. Peake 09:27, 21 July 2022 (UTC)