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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Laurence Cousin/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 13:02, 6 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs)

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

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Prose

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Lede

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  • Considered a pioneer in the sport, Cousin became in 2005 the first European female black belt in Brazilian jiu-jitsu and in 2007 the first woman from outside Brazil to become IBJJF World Champion - could probably be expanded. Maybe "In 2005, Cousin became the first European female black belt in Brazilian jiu-jitsu after winning bronze at the 2005 IBJJF World Championship. Two years later, in 2007, she became the first woman from outside Brazil to win the 2007 IBJFF World Jiu-Jitsu Championship, finishing runner-up the following year." I'd also mention something post-2008 as she did win a European championship. Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 20:23, 9 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]
     Done Expanded the lead. I left out "runner-up" as it is not really a term used in BJJ and I'd rather only list her key accomplishments in the lead. Post 2008 she did not win a European championship but one of the "trials" which is a tournament to select the competitors for the championship, I added a note about that. Lewolka (talk) 11:53, 10 January 2023 (UTC) edited Lewolka (talk) 09:22, 12 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

General

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Review meta comments

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The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.