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Recent GOCE Copy-Edit

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Hello, I recently did a copy-edit of the article. (See here)
There were a few areas where I was unsure of what was being referred to or I needed some information that was not already in the article. I am a lazy copy-editor and have left notes in the source text, but I will post them here as well.

  • In July 2010<!-- did Alonso finish the 2 year contract with Hercules CF or break it early? Please clarify. Drcrazy102-->, Alonso joined Real Valladolid after agreeing to a three-year deal.
  • During October, after he scored in the last minute to help beat Celta de Vigo 3–2 also at the Estadio Nuevo José Zorrilla, manager Antonio Gómez admitted to his excitement<!-- about what? and whose excitement? Is Gomez excited and admitted to it, but what for? Did Gomez admit Alonso was excited, but what for? Please clarify. Drcrazy102 -->.

If editors could please fix those two sections, that would be appreciated. Remember to write the article for people that may not be soccer aficionados/fans and who do not understand some of the terms used. I have also changed the date style to a MM DD, YY format. Cheers, Drcrazy102 (talk) 05:25, 27 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

  • Hello. First of all, the correct date template approach in the English WP id DAY/MONTH/YEAR, not MONTH/DAY/YEAR. About your doubts: 1 - that's why I wrote "however" (and you removed it), it implies he broke his contract with Hércules to move to Valladolid; 2 - I have already asked for assistance to clarify that bit of his coach being excited, I don't think it should even be part of the storyline but I left it stay out of respect for the user that inserted it.

Last but not least, I have tried to reach a compromise between your storyline and mine, please leave the current version be. Attentively, from Portugal --84.90.219.128 (talk) 18:48, 30 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]