Talk:Iyengar Yoga/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 17:28, 22 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will review. MWright96 (talk) 17:28, 22 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks, will respond promptly. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:40, 22 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

History

"B. K. S. Iyengar began teaching gradually," - clarify what exactly Iyengar was teaching

Done.

"The book has been described as the bible of modern yoga," - perhaps mention who described the boook as the bible of modern yoga

Done.

"and has been translated into at least 23 languages.[9][1]" - refs in numerical order please

Done.

Wikilink Pune

Done.

"in Inner London Education Authority evening classes" - try to avoid a violation of WP:SEAOFBLUE by rewriting this section of text

Done.

I believe the fifth paragraph in this section would be better off merged into the fourth paragraph in this section

Done.

Style

"The style "emphasises precision and alignment"," - according to whom?

Attributed.

"i.e. moving a little in the right direction" - slightly is more formal

Edited.

"Postures are held for a relatively long period compared to other schools of yoga;" - clarify it is a long period of time

Done.

"to enjoy the benefits of many asanas" - this sounds a little informal and might be better off to be made more formal if possible

Done

"Postures are held for a relatively long period" - same query as the third one in this section

Done.

"(such as Trikonasana and Virabhadrasana[18])," - the reference would be better off placed at the end of the comma

Done.

Trikonasana should not be linked twice in close succession

Fixed.

Delink Mary Dunn since she is already linked in the previous section

Done.

Training, certification, and standards

"and updated its ethics standards (based on the Yamas and Niyamas in the Yoga Sutras of Patanjali)" - don't think the parentheses are appropriate here

Removed.

References

Reference 4 should include the page number that states where the information is located

This is intentionally citing the whole book, to fit the context of that sentence.

Reference 19 is missing the date it was published

Added.

Reference 26 should mention the date it was published and the author who wrote the source

Added.

References 27 & 28 should mention the date the sources were accessed

Added.

Overall the main issues are with the prose and some fields missing from a few of the references. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 18:32, 22 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

MWright96 All done to date. Chiswick Chap (talk) 21:00, 22 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 06:32, 23 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]