Talk:Investigatory Powers Tribunal/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Freedom4U (talk · contribs) 04:14, 4 August 2023 (UTC)

I am failing this article under criteria number one and three of WP:GAFAIL. Here are some of the issues I see in the article just from a quick skim:

• The entirety of the Jurisdiction, Appeals, and People sections are cited to primary sources.
• There is a significant amount of scholarship on the tribunal that the article fails to cover. (See, for example, this Google Scholar search) One source, for example, provides a detailed in-depth level of history on the tribunal; this article provides two sentences on the history of the tribunal. The same is the case with the criticism section, which does not adequately cover the subject matter.
• The lede does not adequately summarize the content of the article.
• The article needs a large amount of copyediting:
  • There are spaces between full stops and citations
  • There are one sentence paragraphs that need to be expanded or merged
  • The article uses a significant number of simple sentences that make the prose feel choppy and difficult to read. Examples include the lede and this uncited sentence: The vast majority of decisions are dealt on paper only. This means only a small percentage of cases submitted to the Tribunal proceed to a hearing in court. The Tribunal is under no duty to hold a hearing.
  • Hyphens are being used in place of em-dashes
• There is one tag for weasel-word phrasing that is not addressed.
• There are multiple sentences that don't meet the GA criteria for in-line citations or are just entirely unsourced. Examples below:
  • It exempt from the Freedom of Information Act 2000.
  • The role is somewhat comparable to the role of the procurator fiscal in Sheriff Court fatal accident inquiries.
  • The Tribunal Members are assisted in their work by a Secretariat, who provide administrative support for the Tribunal including investigating complaints as directed by a Tribunal Member.
  • The IPT was established by the Regulation of Investigatory Powers Act 2000 (RIPA 2000), replacing the Interception of Communications Tribunal, the Security Service Tribunal, and the Intelligence Services Tribunal.
  • Paton v Poole Borough Council was a high-profile case of a family who were placed under surveillance by Poole Borough Council in order to investigate claims that the family were not living in the school catchment area which they claimed.

@Dreichh: Sorry this review was quite critical. I hope this assessment is constructive to help improve the article and I encourage you to re-nominate the article once these concerns have been addressed. :3 F4U (they/it) 04:14, 4 August 2023 (UTC)

Cheers, wasn't expecting it to pass just looking for guides on what needs improving. Dreichh (talk) 22:12, 4 August 2023 (UTC)