Talk:Huang Shaoqiang/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Kimikel (talk) 05:46, 30 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: Crisco 1492 (talk · contribs) 13:24, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Kimikel (talk · contribs) 04:28, 27 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I will be reviewing this article as part of the January GAN drive. Please expect comments from me within the next few days. Kimikel (talk) 04:28, 27 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Crisco 1492: As expected, there's little to address for this article. Great work; please take a look at my comments. If you have any questions or concerns regarding my suggestions, please let me know. Thank you. Kimikel (talk) 18:28, 28 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Kimikel. I'm just ducking in shortly before work; I'll be back after my shift. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 11:56, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Kimikel, I believe I have addressed everything. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 18:08, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
@Crisco 1492: I appreciate the prompt and quality work. The article's ready to be promoted now; as such, I'm going to close this review. Thanks and congrats! Kimikel (talk) 05:45, 30 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Well-written

Lead

line-work > I believe "linework" is the more correct term
- Done. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 18:06, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Biography

art – including > comma
- Not done. The early introduction to European artwork is important here, which I think justifies the use of the spaced ndash (which makes it stand out more) as opposed to a comma. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 18:06, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
texts – including > comma
- Done. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 18:06, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
refused, however, to > remove however
- Done. Also removed the comma before "and refused to" as it becomes easier to parse without the however. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 18:06, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Family and legacy

also a painter, and taught > remove comma

Style and analysis

Zhong Lin describes him as having "brought the fundamental and representative line of traditional Chinese painting to its fullest potential",[d][3] and the art scholar deems Huang as groundbreaking in his struggle "to create a new figure painting according to [his] understanding of modern art". > To me, suffers slightly from WP:ELVAR. I would just introduce him as "The art scholar Zhong Lin" and start the second half "and deems Huang".

Zhong Lin was previously introduced in #Early life, so not done that part. Second one refers to Ka Ming Kevin Lam, and I seem to have forgotten to actually include his name here; that's fixed. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 18:06, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

works, however, had > remove however
- Done. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 18:06, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
links with the successive deaths of several family members and the "inescapable nightmare" and "irresistible magic" of Huang's resulting fear of death. > with what does he link all of that? seems like something is missing here.
- You're right; reinserted the subject. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 18:06, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
that, through his explorations > remove comma
- Reworked instead. The clause beginning "through his explorations" is a subordinate clause to "Huang was able to "surpass traditional Chinese figure painting not only in form, but also in spirit, speaking directly to the ontology of modern art and completing the transformation of his figure painting into modern meaning"", and thus needs to be set aside from the main sentence with a pair of commas when presented as introducing the main clause. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 18:06, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
that, due to the historical > remove comma
- Reworked, same as above. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 18:06, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Verifiability

Spot check

6: Are the Foshan Academy of Fine Arts and the Foshan City Arts Institute the same thing?
1. I wasn't able to confirm, so I removed FN6 since everything is supported in Chinese; FN6 was just intended to have an English-language source also supporting part of the sentence. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 18:07, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
14: Verified
11: Verified the Nanhai half
16: Verified
9d: Verified

Broadness, stability, and neutrality

No issues.

Illustrated

All images are properly tagged PD.

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