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GA Review

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Passed. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 12:51, 1 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Nominator: Crisco 1492 (talk · contribs) 16:50, 28 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 06:59, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Putting my name down so I can review this beautiful article. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 06:59, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'm very happy with your clarifications and changes. I'm approving this, nothing outstanding should get in the way of giving it GA. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 12:50, 1 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Prose and content

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  • Gloss Tongmenghui
  • his mother followed two years later bit too euphemistic
  • It's a stylistic choice to avoid repeating "died" twice in one sentence. The closest I can think of as a compromise is "The family was poor. Gao's father Baoxiang died when Gao was seven years old, with his mother dying two years later." They are still the same root, but it does offer some variety. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 10:54, 1 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Gao was thus orphaned at a young age, relied on his elder siblings for support redundant
  • Gao followed his older brother Jianfu followed... into painting?
  • Gao travelled to Tokyo, Japan,
  • Some inconsistency on capitalization of western throughout
  • approaches to perspective and sketching, remove comma per WP:CINS
  • lyricism is there another word you can use for this? Else, gloss
  • holding that the truth, goodness, and beauty of art could better address the human condition with insight into society's woes.
  • better than...?
  • If this is true, then why is he studying sociology? Surely he already has the insight into society he needs by virtue of his art?
  • The source quotes Gao as saying "In addition to studying anatomy, pigmentology, optics, philosophy, natural science, the six ancient methods, and the origin of painting, when we study painting, we should also study psychology and sociology. Study clearly. Understand all the needs of society, and then use the study of truth, goodness and beauty to feel the turbid society, comfort the boring life, and cultivate the spirit of the people, so that they can develop noble and peaceful concept." He is thus not advocating for sociology as a formal science, but rather emphasizing the need for the artist to know the human mind and human society. I've added a footnote with the above quote. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 10:54, 1 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Rw "society's woes", more neutral
  • Teaching art, Gao believed, would bring with it better understandings of ethics and social conditions. clarify whether this is for him or for the students
  • Zhang continued to push for the state to give Gao recognition. introduce that she had been pushing for this before this
  • All three shared similar backgrounds reword this to say the Gaos had a similar background to... because it's very strange to say the brothers came from similar backgrounds
  • Not done. "The Gaos and Chan shared similar backgrounds" could work, but reviewing Gao Jianfu's specific experiences (including his status as the leader of an assassination cell, and the fact that he was in Japan first), it feels presumptuous to assume that familiar ties necessarily imply a shared background.  — Chris Woodrich (talk) 11:01, 1 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • with the union producing a very formal, "the pair having a"
  • after his illness → after he became ill
  • Zhang was so distraught that she mixed her tears with powder to paint plum blossoms, using her own blood for the sepals wow
  • recalls past tense
  • In the market, redundant
  • They appear rougher yet more intimate, with meticulous detail giving way to more spontaneous imagery. careful with attributing this

Suggestions

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  • When doing a spaced en dash, e.g. of the natural world – at first flowers and insects use Template:sndashs
  • I think there could be quite a few more redlinks which are helpful for addressing systematic bias, such as Feng Shan, Tanaka Raisho and Tianfeng Seven.
  • Use template:inflation for 2,000 yuan

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 10:03, 1 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sources

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  • [5a] Green tickY
  • [10a] Green tickY
  • [10c] Green tickY
  • [15] Magenta clockclock I'll be able to get access to this book in a few hours, so holding off on evaluating.
I won't be able to access this so AGF. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 12:50, 1 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • [20] Green tickY
  • [25] Magenta clockclock I have an old edition, which doesn't mention this on this page. It's also not turning up in a search in the linked Google Books copy. Could you quote this for me?
  • [30] Green tickY
  • [35] Green tickY

Other

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  • No OR / COPYVIO Magenta clockclock pending quote for [25] 9.9% wp:earwig
Green tickY per above
  • Stable Green tickY
  • Images appropriately captioned / tagged Magenta clockclock Snow in the Wu Ravine (1916) should be tagged PD-100 I imagine
  • Broad / summary style Green tickY
  • Neutral Green tickY

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 10:46, 1 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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