Talk:Explorers on the Moon

Explorers on the Moon has been listed as one of the Language and literature good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Review: September 25, 2015. (Reviewed version).

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GA Review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:Explorers on the Moon/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 11:31, 24 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I will review this article. Thank you. — Ssven2 ^{Speak 2 me} 11:31, 24 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments[edit]

Lede

"Explorers on the Moon (French: On a marché sur la Lune) is the seventeenth of The Adventures of Tintin, " — Seventeenth what?
- Volume! I have no idea how I missed that. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"who are aboard a manner rocket mission to the moon." — Do you mean "manned rocket"? Sounds better than "manner rocket", which might make the reader feel that the rocket lacks mannerisms! LOL.
- Well spotted! Changed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"of the story. The story was" — Avoid repetition of story.
- I've gone with "volume" here although would be up for any alternative suggestions. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Synopsis

"disrupting the artificial gravity and sending everyone floating" — Wikilinks for "artificial gravity" and "floating" could be better for those readers who are not wholly aware of the two terms. For clarity's sake.
- Good point! I've added a link to the former although could not find an appropriate link for "floating". Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Found the link for 'floating' myself. — Ssven2 ^{Speak 2 me} 03:13, 25 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

A simpler word for "fissure" would be good as the word seems a tad complicated. Maybe chasm?
- I've gone with chasm, although I think that it is probably on a similar level to fissure. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Actually, chasm is a synonym of fissure, which sounded more scientific and some readers might not understand it well. — Ssven2 ^{Speak 2 me} 03:13, 25 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

History

"Publishers were unhappy" — Who? Casterman or Turner and Cooper?
- That would be Casterman. I've changed it. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thats about it from me. Once again, great job, Midnightblueowl. Do ping me when you have resolved the comments. — Ssven2 ^{Speak 2 me} 12:24, 24 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

That's great Ssven2; many thanks! Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. Has an appropriate reference section:

B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.
Pass or Fail:

@Midnightblueowl: Thank you for resolving them, Midnightblueowl. Congratulations! — Ssven2 ^{Speak 2 me} 03:15, 25 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Bob de Moor[edit]

How come we have a GA on this book which doesn't even mention Bob de Moor? Seems like a serious oversight. Destination Moon (comics), also a GA, does mention him (the fact that he got hired), but again nothing further. According to Pierre Assouline, De Moor already played a "pivotal role" in Destination Moon (backgorunds, and the rocket!)[1], and we all know how much the Moon landscapes by De Moor were essential in the look of the "Explorers" story. The De Moor biography has more information[2]. Fram (talk) 08:26, 5 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]