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Nominator: PanagiotisZois (talk · contribs) 20:35, 22 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Crisco 1492 (talk · contribs) 16:32, 21 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

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  1. File:Eating Out 2 Theatrical Poster.jpg - Fair use image, FUR appears complete and detailed. Source is valid.
  2. File:Eating Out 2 Cast.jpg - Fair use image, FUR appears complete and detailed. AGF on offline source.

Prose and comprehensiveness review

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Lede

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  • sequel to Eating Out (2004) - Is sequel a high value blue link? It feels like the average reader will know what a sequel is.
    • Changed.
  • who is unsure of his sexual preferences. - Is preferences the right word here? Troy reads as bi, leaning hetero, in the summary.
    • @Crisco 1492: Thank you for taking the time to review this article! I might be a bit slow to handle everything due to other commitments. Regarding your point above: Hmm... Well, Troy does admit that he's been with women and some men. But at the same time he's also not sure if he's gay or straight for most of the film. He definitely think that he shouldn't have feelings for men and tries to be straight. It's not until the film's last 15 minutes or so that he's like, "I'm bisexual and proud of it". I'm not entirely sure how to put all that in the lede. Could "unsure" be replaced with "uncertain" maybe that he is "questioning his sexuality"? --PanagiotisZois (talk) 19:38, 22 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      • I was wondering more about "preferences". I'll admit that I'm not up-to-date on the most recent discourses in sexual orientation and identity, but I do remember that in the 90s and 00s there were a lot of efforts to fight the view that being gay was a "choice". Preference implies a choice, to me at least, whereas "orientation" does not (the APA dictionary of psychology describes "preference" as outdated as well). Would "who is questioning his sexuality" or "who is exploring his sexual identity" work better? Or "who is seeking to understand his sexual orientation", even? — Chris Woodrich (talk) 22:41, 22 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
        Altered it to "questioning his sexuality". PanagiotisZois (talk) 13:57, 23 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Plot

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  • hotter - This doesn't seem to be appropriate, per WP:TONE. We should avoid slang
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  • Kyle and the girls devise a scheme in which Kyle pretends to be an ex-gay who is dating Tiffani, to overcome Troy's inhibitions and get him to sleep with the both of them - Did he make this plot with Gwen as well? You've introduced her in the previous line, so "both of them" could be ambiguous.
  • the two have oral sex, but Marc cannot go through with it because he still has feelings for Kyle. - "go through with it" is ambiguous in this context. Do they start undressing, then Marc realizes that he is unready, or does he withdraw consent during the act?
    • Marc performs oral sex on Troy. Troy then starts giving head to Marc who is initially into it. However, after seeing a photograph on the shelf of himself with Kyle, he regrets them having sex. I have made a few changes which I hope are all right. --PanagiotisZois (talk) 14:03, 23 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • witnessing the debacle - Are they peeking on the threesome, or is there another matter they witness?
    • They were peeking through the window, so I added that in.

Production

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  • Aside from Dapper, did any of the cast discuss their experiences in detail? Based on what's written here, it sounds like they were approached and, for the most part, just said "Alright".
    • Unfortunately, none of the sources I've found include any other statements from the remaining cast members. The DVD did include audio commentary, but I haven't been able to get my hands on that thus far. I'll see about working on that in the future.

Reception

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  • Despite its low budget - is there any reporting on the film's budget?
    • Sadly, nothing.
  • Nelson also highlighted Dapper's full-frontal scene, describing it as being of "impressive length"; - "It" is ambiguous. The next quote makes it sound like Dapper's penis is the "impressive length", but the context suggests that the scene had his nude body on-camera for a long time. Which is correct?
  • Overall, the reception section feels awfully heavy on the quotes. This is to be expected, certainly, but we have repetitions of the word "hunky", as well as multiple uses of the word "also" to repeat ideas that could have been condensed with "several reviewers" or something similar.

Source review

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  • Earwig found 40.1% similarity. Reviewing the examples provided, these are all the film's title or properly attributed quotes. Therefore, no copyvio detected.
  • What makes greginhollywood.com a reliable source?
    • Seems a bit low-quality, so I removed it.
  • Would be preferable for all online sources to have archives, if possible. The article is inconsistent in this regard.
    • The only sources I noticed that weren't archived were the 2 newspaper sources. I've added archive links to both.
  • Please review sources for title case (contrast 42 and 43, for example)
    • I believe I've rectified that properly.
  • Documentary - Is Allan Brocka on YouTube the same Q. Allan Brocka mentioned in the article? Per WP:COPYLINK, we need to be sure that he has the right to host this material before linking it. He is not the copyright holder; Quantic is.
    • @Crisco 1492: Based on the IMDB page for the mini documentary, the director was David Quantic. I'm not entirely sure if the channel is indeed Q. Allan Brocka's or not, but it seems to be the case. The avoid any issues with copyright, I can removed the link to the YouTube video. My only question is how exactly to reformat the source. How are DVD extras like this cited on Wikipedia?--PanagiotisZois (talk) 11:29, 25 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    I made a few changes to the citation, though I'm still not sure if it's all right like this. PanagiotisZois (talk) 12:58, 25 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    It's undocumented, but I see that CITE AV has "chapter" functionality. What about...
Quantic, David (May 29, 2007). "Serving Seconds: The Making of Eating Out 2". Eating Out 2: Sloppy Seconds. Ariztical Entertainment.
There's also an OCLC for the DVD (186338904) but since you aren't using any OCLCs, might not be necessary. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 18:25, 25 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Oh, great suggestion. The SFN thing still works perfectly. Thank you! I'll just work a bit more on the "Reception" section now, and then I'll be done. PanagiotisZois (talk) 19:51, 25 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Conclusion

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 On hold Overall, this is very close to ready. Just a few nitpicks, mostly. Also, please note that I edited the article while reviewing. Please review to confirm no meanings have been changed. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 17:26, 21 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Crisco 1492: Just wanted to let you know that I've revised a small portion of the "Plot" section to hopefully clear a few things up. I've also replaced the promotional still image from the "Reception" section a GIF that, while risque, is definitely more appropriate given what the section itself is discussing. If you think using a GIF is too much and that a still image would be more appropriate-or that alternatively, one isn't necessary at all-I'm definitely willing to make the necessary changes. PanagiotisZois (talk) 15:51, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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