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Resources Found

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https://www.wired.com/2010/09/bright-dust-devil-tracks/

http://www.uahirise.org/ESP_031199_2070

http://www.hou.usra.edu/meetings/lpsc2014/pdf/2011.pdf

I have found these resources and am planning on using them to further add to the article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Nickyardley18 (talkcontribs) 22:05, 21 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Additional Resources

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I am planning on using these resources to add to this article.

"New Findings from T. Statella and Co-Authors in the Area of Astronomy Research Reported (Comparing wind directions inferred from Martian dust devil tracks analysis with those predicted by the Mars Climate Database)." Science Letter, 11 Nov. 2016, p. 1167. Expanded Academic ASAP, go.galegroup.com/ps/i.do?p=EAIM&sw=w&u=mcc_pv&v=2.1&id=GALE%7CA469002578&it=r&asid=bcb2c5244bc4b17b72000fe804c06962. Accessed 21 Nov. 2016. "Dust devils detected by seismometer could guide Mars mission." Space Daily, 14 Nov. 2015. General OneFile, go.galegroup.com/ps/i.do?p=ITOF&sw=w&u=mcc_pv&v=2.1&it=r&id=GALE%7CA434512955&sid=summon&asid=d655d412b8dcd626e2f4449519f78292. Accessed 21 Nov. 2016. Leovy, C. B. (2003). The devil is in the dust. Nature, 424(6952), 1008-9. Retrieved from http://search.proquest.com.ezproxy.pvc.maricopa.edu/docview/204522478?accountid=36238 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Gelatinxbox (talkcontribs) 22:09, 21 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Last paragraph

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1) The paragraphs were arranged such that section breaks were natural. So I added section headings to make the structure more formal.

2) The last paragraph is fairly incoherent. The first sentence is a run-on, and the part before the first comma does not seem to belong. The next three sentences are a bit confusing. I can't tell if the "Traditional" observations are from Mars or Earth. I don't know what the rain means or why it is "in conclusion". The word "indefinitely" does not seem to belong in the last sentence. Are the lighter marks on Mars? Are there similarly light marks on earth? The wording in this paragraph is very imprecise. I'm not fixing it because I have not read the reference material.Elriana (talk) 22:12, 19 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Rewrite/overhaul

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I have rewritten this article to improve its syntax, as well as overhaul its sources. I introduced some new ones although others were deleted. MacArthur44 (talk) 07:38, 11 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Assessed as C-class. Much better than the original, so thanks for rewriting! Could use further expansion, if you're up to it, and spacecraft names should be italicized per MOS:NAT. ARandomName123 (talk)Ping me! 00:44, 13 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]